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Feeling this Dream

Postby Just Silver » Jan 9th, '10, 00:42

Whenever i hop off the bus instrumentals play,
instruments and bass, lead with increments and take,
my music video to an upbringing ,i got the best clothes
and never suck singing,
address kids, and flash with my chain, impress the bitch
and the back of my brain,
saying no way, you can do that stuff, praying that i can school this bunch,
battle two at lunch, feeling is like a blunt, but real things are
getting by this month,
bills pile up ,still miles tough, to get my intentions riled up,
suspension file put, mention my own soot,
that made me burn what wood, have
stepped to me teachers, become referees, preacher to some refugee,
jailed in my own mentally, trapped capabilities,
take mics willing ease,
gucci girls want to be sought from me, just believe dreams,
slovenly deemed,
for real but right now
i can remain this appeal, think concealed of this life
i wish for dough rocks and chain, hoes stop and remain
for not just a gain, for the simple emotional pain
notions will stay, for any loc with an eighth, or a boat full of caine,
stimulated by a disconnection participated narcoleptic
in this daydream of sophisticated contravention
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Re: Feeling this Dream

Postby bullet_boy46 » Jan 9th, '10, 00:43

fia-powa

stimulated by a disconnection participated narcoleptic
in this daydream of sophisticated contravention


i was like WTF did you say? nice shit man :worship:
Solace wrote:Oh stop your making me blush :blinking:

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Re: Feeling this Dream

Postby Fa-Q » Jan 9th, '10, 00:50

...Hmmm not your best Silv...I'm not one to push structure...but this would have been a lot better if the structure was easier to read and...the multis were lacking then what you really drop all the time. Com'o' silv...you can do bette®
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Re: Feeling this Dream

Postby Just Silver » Jan 9th, '10, 00:52

bullet_boy46 wrote:fia-powa

stimulated by a disconnection participated narcoleptic
in this daydream of sophisticated contravention


i was like WTF did you say? nice shit man :worship:

i was saying i get my energy by drifting off staying up in the made up world that i made

contravention equals violation so sophisticated contravention would mean hard to see what is so unbelievable or unrealistic about it
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Re: Feeling this Dream

Postby bullet_boy46 » Jan 9th, '10, 00:54

Just Silver wrote:
bullet_boy46 wrote:fia-powa

stimulated by a disconnection participated narcoleptic
in this daydream of sophisticated contravention


i was like WTF did you say? nice shit man :worship:

i was saying i get my energy by drifting off staying up in the made up world that i made

contravention equals violation so sophisticated contravention would mean hard to see what is so unbelievable or unrealistic about it

:confusion: still dont get it :'(
Solace wrote:Oh stop your making me blush :blinking:

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Re: Feeling this Dream

Postby Just Silver » Jan 9th, '10, 01:02

Fa-Q wrote:...Hmmm not your best Silv...I'm not one to push structure...but this would have been a lot better if the structure was easier to read and...the multis were lacking then what you really drop all the time. Com'o' silv...you can do bette®

i had writers block but was still trying to drop because of my lack of work.
structure has been suffering because i for get to hit the return key :sweating:
until last minute
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Re: Feeling this Dream

Postby Jens14 » Jan 9th, '10, 01:22

I like it :y:
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Re: Feeling this Dream

Postby Fa-Q » Jan 9th, '10, 01:26

I know what you're going through, it sucks but you'll get past it
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Re: Feeling this Dream

Postby Yah-hah » Jan 9th, '10, 07:08

Lol at the return key I do that all of the time. Yeah dude writers block is a bitch, you slap her around on a constant basis though and she'll act right :laughing: Sad part is that actually means something.
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