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Evil Spirits (Unfinished)

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Evil Spirits (Unfinished)

Postby bullet_boy46 » Jan 10th, '10, 02:51

INTRO: ghost sounds. whispers... creepy :shifty:

VERSE: my morbid evil scripts, torture feeble kids
take this lose, watch, sit
your going to war with jesus bitch
leave your corpse depleted with
brains lying across the street and shit
just quit while your a head like aborted fetuses (eww)
just applaud and eat some cream
bring it to me and ill sever your fucking team
left dead with a ruptured spleen
put your head where your nuts should be
everyone knows you adopted my style see?
shit you practically begged me for custody
get off your knees, release my dick abandon beef
your posts lack hot shit, flows wack stop it
spit at me
ill do like Clyde Drexler jerseys and throw back rockets
what made you do it kiddo
yer gassed just let go
play my cards right dealing blows
my boys steal the show runnin with a cast of cleptos


HOOK: these evil spirits
running in side of me
these evil spirits
just wont let me free

((x2))

http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index ... AGFapJ&r=w :coffee:
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Re: Evil Spirits (Unfinished)

Postby bullet_boy46 » Jan 10th, '10, 04:26

bump-olla :whistle:
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Re: Evil Spirits (Unfinished)

Postby slimshady13 » Jan 10th, '10, 04:52

Love the clyde drexler reference
overall its pretty good, i love the flow ( how it sounded in my head)
Never been afraid to say whats on my mind at any givin time or day
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Re: Evil Spirits (Unfinished)

Postby Just Silver » Jan 10th, '10, 04:57

very surprised in a good way

loved the fetus line lol

overall really good stuff :y: :y:
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Re: Evil Spirits (Unfinished)

Postby bullet_boy46 » Jan 10th, '10, 04:59

lol thanks guys :worship: im doing a track now. if you guys up for a collab im always availble ;) well..for 2 months :sweating:
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Re: Evil Spirits (Unfinished)

Postby Just Silver » Jan 10th, '10, 05:00

bullet_boy46 wrote:lol thanks guys :worship: im doing a track now. if you guys up for a collab im always availble ;) well..for 2 months :sweating:

2mnths?
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Re: Evil Spirits (Unfinished)

Postby bullet_boy46 » Jan 10th, '10, 05:03

Just Silver wrote:
bullet_boy46 wrote:lol thanks guys :worship: im doing a track now. if you guys up for a collab im always availble ;) well..for 2 months :sweating:

2mnths?

going back to school..i have off 2 months some reason.. dont ask why :sweating: also that yahoo link has my other song soo. :whistle: im making an EP :D
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Re: Evil Spirits (Unfinished)

Postby Fa-Q » Jan 10th, '10, 05:17

Hey I like this..but the thing about creepy songs like this is you have to emphasize imagery...and its a bit lacking on imagery...everything else is great tho BB...lookin good
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Re: Evil Spirits (Unfinished)

Postby bullet_boy46 » Jan 10th, '10, 05:29

thanks
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