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Things Feel Okay

Postby FAME » Jan 11th, '10, 03:55

I was built by a creator, perfect fucking design
The reason why, is simply dollars signs in mind
Just here to make enough, to stay alive for my life
So I sit here and write, making every words just right
This isn’t like a rerun, I’m in it for the long run
It’s time for you all to see, my time has come
I regret nothing I’ve done, even if its in the moment
I go ahead and push away my fear, and just control it
Similes and metaphors, English class wasn’t a bore
These words and phrases, I loved to go and explore
Trained my self to write, mulits lessons from vets
I’m at the point now, what do I need to learn next
Soak rap up like a sponge, wring me out and see
A perfect symphony of rhymes, it’s obviously
My practice paying off, getting better everyday
I spit an array of lines, see what sticks to the display

I don’t know why
But I still try
I grab the mic
And things feel right
I don’t know why
But I still try
I get on stage
And things feel okay

I guess I have to keep proving, my spoken lyrics
Have to keep up to date, keep my words coherent
But the news puts rap in a bad place, like stay away
These words seem to seep in your brain and decay
Fuck shit like that, I learned to many words from rap
Make every one like that take a headphone and sit back
Listen to the subliminal message, incased in the rhymes
Don’t critique music, on the ones who speak about crimes
And boast about their cars, rims, and their money
Just shrug them off, and laugh like your pretty funny
This is the new generation, bringing real stories
Not worrying about, how much is in our inventory
Even though my name seems to be Hollywood like
Me and that world have absolutely nothing alike
I do this for my own reason, only myself I am pleasing
The only thing about fame, is it’s the thing I am seizing

Now I know why
That I still try
I grab the mic
And things feel right
Now I know why
That I still try
I get on stage
And things feel okay


Listening to D.O.A, and I started to write something, I actually kinda like it! :flutter:
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Re: Things Feel Okay

Postby Fa-Q » Jan 11th, '10, 03:59

Hey fame I like this piece...I got hooked by the first lines...real emotion piece....the only weakness really I see is the hook...its just ok for me...but the verses are great..I see you've been workin on your multis
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Re: Things Feel Okay

Postby FAME » Jan 11th, '10, 04:04

Thanks bro :)
I agree with you about the chorus, I kinda put it in there last minute, probably should have put more thought into it. And yeah, let's just say Im always writing something in class :sweating:
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Re: Things Feel Okay

Postby classthe_king » Jan 11th, '10, 04:09

This looks great, everything is on point except for multis. Thats all you need to work on :y:
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Re: Things Feel Okay

Postby gutawafang » Jan 11th, '10, 04:51

PRetty cool chorus, FAME.

The verses were rhymes but still pretty on point, which is good. Good job.
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Re: Things Feel Okay

Postby Element. » Jan 11th, '10, 08:20

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Re: Things Feel Okay

Postby Yah-hah » Jan 11th, '10, 08:53

FAME wrote:
Trained my self to write, mulits lessons from vets

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Thanks for the shouty lmao. I really really love this song, idk why it just flows like a really chill, lowkey song. I actually like the chorus like a real simple personal chorus feel I dig it. One of my favorites from you seriously love this one. Really good job girl :y: :y: :y: :y: :y:
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Re: Things Feel Okay

Postby macdaddy019967 » Jan 11th, '10, 09:00

i like it like the other said nice emotion into this i felt it
and seemed to flow pretty well altogether :y:
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