My song called Demon Doors (1st verse and chorus)

[ShaBruv]

Hope you like it and tell me what you think


Demon Doors




The sun is settin’
But I’m not frettin’
Tryna getta way from these demons getting’
A hold of my mind
Turning me blind
Effecting me when i’m writing my rhymes
But I don’t care
When I’m not there
Cuz a talent like me is oh so rare
When i’m telling
So compelling
Hooked you in then we started gelling
Aint I something
When I’m struttin
But still those demon doors aint shutting
In my brain
Damn insane
Washing out an eternal bloodstain
From my knife
Pain and strife
What am I gonna do with this messed up life

Chorus times 2

These demon doors (these demon doors)times 2
I do not know what I have done
For I am just a mere Satan son
The rhymes I spit from these fucked up jaws
Are results of these demon doors
These demon doors (these demon doors)

These demon doors (these demon doors)
I do not know what I have done
For I am just a mere Satan son
The rhymes I spit from these fucked up jaws
Are results of these demon doors
These demon doors (these demon doors)times 2

[gutawafang]

Sing it. Hard to rap it out though I liked it. Inspiring lyrics.

[Slim Zaddy]

it was good , but flow is is kina off in the middle .. but good try

[Solace]

This reminded me heavily of Eminem's Demon Inside, not to say your biting him but with a username of ShadyBruvaz i cant say its a lil suspicious lol.

It was pretty decent, I could rap it. Just think you needa fix your structure. Eg.

The sun is settin’
But I’m not frettin’
Tryna getta way from these demons getting’
A hold of my mind
Turning me blind
Effecting me when i’m writing my rhymes

to

The sun is settin', but I'm not frettin',
Tryna getta way from these demons getting,
A hold of my mind, turning me blind,
Effecting me when I'm writing my rhymes

Hope you get what I mean

Keep at it, hope to see you post more up in CW!

[D'Leh]

good rhymes good flow

[ShaBruv]

It sort of goes like this

The sun i setting but i'm not fretting
Daa-da-da-dada da-da-da- dada

Tryna get away from the demons getting
dada-da-dada-da-da-da-da dada
rap it like dizzie rascal

[ShaBruv]

Solace that was what inspired me and im not tryin to bite him this is just a sign of respect to him

[Arabian Shady]

This reminded me heavily of Eminem's Demon Inside, not to say your biting him but with a username of ShadyBruvaz i cant say its a lil suspicious lol.

It was pretty decent, I could rap it. Just think you needa fix your structure. Eg.

The sun is settin’
But I’m not frettin’
Tryna getta way from these demons getting’
A hold of my mind
Turning me blind
Effecting me when i’m writing my rhymes

to

The sun is settin', but I'm not frettin',
Tryna getta way from these demons getting,
A hold of my mind, turning me blind,
Effecting me when I'm writing my rhymes

Hope you get what I mean

Keep at it, hope to see you post more up in CW!

word homie, i was just goin to suggest that!

[Slim Zaddy]

It sort of goes like this

The sun i setting but i'm not fretting
Daa-da-da-dada da-da-da- dada

Tryna get away from the demons getting
dada-da-dada-da-da-da-da dada
rap it like dizzie rascal

this way it sounds better , and the way solace fixed it , it flowed much better .. so flow now is dope

[bapetlk]

fuckin amateur rhymes, sounds like someone who has never heard any rap try and rap. and you guys aer encouraging this little shit, oh dear.[*]

[Solace]

fuckin amateur rhymes, sounds like someone who has never heard any rap try and rap. and you guys aer encouraging this little shit, oh dear.[*]

Then read someone who's better

[ShaBruv]

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fuckin amateur rhymes, sounds like someone who has never heard any rap try and rap. and you guys aer encouraging this little shit, oh dear.[*]

yh fuck off i did just as bored and strung a through obviously basic rhymes i know its not fucking any good just thort id post just to see what you lot think and i dont want fucking gayasses who claim to be hip hop heads posting their opinions when i'm sure you're gonna become a famous rapper.Bitch