Timekeeper feat. Deal Trees "The Introduction"

[Timekeeper]

The Introduction

[Deal Trees]
I'm Tschoke, when I join the fight
Bitches choke on mics
You gonna get smoked tonight, gimme a light
It's a sleight of hand, it's like counting cards
It ain't cheating till you get caught
The drugs ain't bad till your brain rots
And I deal trees like brain freeze to babies
Like a squirrel with rabies or scabies
Crying "save me" and I shout back "Make me!"
This is the introduction, bitch stop your interruption
You talkin' all that dumb shit, now it back and watch us run with it

[TK]
It's Timekeeper, I fought the Grim Reaper
And survived, I stole his scythe but I'm still alive
Undeniable, unreliable narrator
Words are undefinable, like a hair-raiser
In a suit, a black blazer
Using lasers and phasers, set to kill
Blast your head off and shoot you still
Pass the mic back to my man Will

(Deal Trees) "Alright, here's what's next..."

No wait, I ain't done yet
I got a few more lines, so don't fret
I step inside the ring and bring no one
Smack you upside the head like a fucking cold one
Rhymes too smart you can't follow
Diss you so slick you're thinkin' bout it tomorrow
Robin, the Boy Wonder
Bite my style, steal my thunder
Drown you in ther iver, now you're goin' under
Till you get famous and you got somethin' to talk about
You just run your mouth, now the word's out
Without a shadow of a doubt
You're fightin' somethin' you know nothin' about

[Deal Trees]
Oh, hey there, Hi
Now where was I?
Oh right, I'm just tellin another lie
Stretchin' the truth about how I can't die
But you can try to kill me, cause I'm a only a man
Who's faster than you, and
Catch me if you can, and
You can call my bluff
This is real talk and real tough
Walk away, this is gonna get rough
Real fast, and I'ma whip your punk ass
If you talk shit to me, if you got beef with me
Cry about it, go take a nap you baby
And it's time to put a wrap on this rap maybe
With a snap of my fingers
Your whole life disappears, but I still linger
Now DJ let the beat run and let's get the fuck outta here




Not sure how I feel about Tschoke's lines on this, might ask him to do a rewrite.

[Yah-hah]

wat nationality is trees? sounds like a native name. I like timekeepers better. Good shit yall

[Element.]

Not bad

[Timekeeper]

Trees is white, his name's a pot reference.

I've got more shit we've written if anyone's interested.

[Fa-Q]

Mmm..I didn't really like it...on paper it looked a little too mainstream...sorry...

[Timekeeper]

Aight that's cool, I ain't gonna please the whole world.

Got any tips?

[Fa-Q]

Aight that's cool, I ain't gonna please the whole world.

Got any tips?

Try longer lines and better structure...it makes it less choppy...

Try some more multis and expand your vocabulary a lot...it makes it a better read and less mediocre.

And finally read up the MCs on here. Yah, Solace, Zu, Spyder, Coleon, BILI, Silver, yours truely...read up how they write, don't mimick it just develop yourself and your writing...you'll be good