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Off This Block

Postby Just Silver » Jan 9th, '10, 19:51

Breaking my brakes, through lancet windows,
sound like sampling cymbals, trampling insoles,
stop what ive been told, doing it tenfold,
until my engine blows, from temps of tempos,
so, going fast forward, exploding, sash bordered,
around these "pains" of windows, in the mind, i defend for
time,yes i spend more, crime-less, use zen for
spores of adolescence still floating around,
sailing thoughts and truths, boat in the clouds
gloat when im proud, those who allow,
the spoken with crowd, to get up and announce,
how life is "pronounced", in gods dictionary
frauds dissent every, word in the bible
a wordy disciple, of the turning to nightfall,
burning who might fall, never taking my sights off,
got the extra clips, in case a messy miss
from me a dressy pimp, make your flesh limp,
fall off the bone like the best ribs ,
cess in a bag smoke it up makes me express with
endurance, endure fans, of those that plot plans,
from pot plants, and stop sand,in this hour glass,
our time has past, to out rhyme the fast, be sly and outclass,
smoke trees and sprout laughs, spouse is gas, marry a fiery flash,
you can take my diary as, a whole writing with stashed,
stabs, what a fight and a half, take my cake in a bag
time to leave and run, from this writers block that I've seen to come
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Re: 2 Writers Blocks Over

Postby Edge » Jan 9th, '10, 21:38

Just Silver wrote:Breaking my brakes, through lancet windows,
sound like sampling cymbals, trampling insoles,
stop what ive been told, doing it tenfold,
until my engine blows, from temps of tempos,
so, going fast forward, exploding, sash bordered,
around these "pains" of windows, in the mind, i defend for
time,yes i spend more, crime-less, use zen for
spores of adolescence still floating around,
sailing thoughts and truths, boat in the clouds
gloat when im proud, those who allow,
the spoken with crowd, to get up and announce,
how life is "pronounced", in gods dictionary
frauds dissent every, word in the bible
a wordy disciple, of the turning to nightfall,
burning who might fall, never taking my sights off,
got the extra clips, in case a messy miss
from me a dressy pimp, make your flesh limp,
fall off the bone like the best ribs ,
cess in a bag smoke it up makes me express with
endurance, endure fans, of those that plot plans,
from pot plants, and stop sand,in this hour glass,
our time has past, to out rhyme the fast, be sly and outclass,
smoke trees and sprout laughs, spouse is gas, marry a fiery flash,
you can take my diary as, a whole writing with stashed,
stabs, what a fight and a half, take my cake in a bag
time to leave and run, from this writers block that I've seen to come



i see ur big on multis lol i liked this drop... some multis seemed a little forced but it was pretty much on lock :y: i like the window pane-pain wordplay and a bunch of the little punchlines were nice :y:
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Re: Off This Block

Postby Just Silver » Jan 9th, '10, 22:07

actually i hate stressing multis thats why i use the stop method
like when end with "as" or "if" etc
but yeah people said my other drop lacked in multis so... bamm!
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Re: Off This Block

Postby Edge » Jan 9th, '10, 22:13

haha, i always got yelled at for not using multis so i started using them and now i love them lol
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Re: Off This Block

Postby Just Silver » Jan 10th, '10, 03:56

bump :whistle:
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Re: Off This Block

Postby Yah-hah » Jan 10th, '10, 17:41

I dig it homie. I see ya comin back off that block pretty good lol. I see them multis :y:
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Re: Off This Block

Postby Just Silver » Jan 10th, '10, 22:41

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Re: Off This Block

Postby Just Silver » Jan 12th, '10, 03:36

Last bump ever i swear lol :sweating: :sweating:
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Re: Off This Block

Postby FAME » Jan 12th, '10, 07:21

Just Silver wrote:stop what ive been told, doing it tenfold,
until my engine blows, from temps of tempos,


:o I love this part.
Nice drop dude :y: I also hate to end mulits with often used words, so I liked how you used uncommon words in your rhymes. I'm gonna be honest because I haven't read much of the CW stuff, but now that I am, I certainly need to keep up with your stuff.
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Re: Off This Block

Postby gutawafang » Jan 12th, '10, 09:01

Lots of imagery in this piece man. Good one. :y:
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