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W.A.P Ode To... (Wisdom And Poetry)

Postby mcZu » Jan 9th, '10, 22:45

Third verse in this series, it's an ode to a girl. Enjoy.

‘’Danielle’’

She is eloquent, eccentric and has sympathy
All elements that mask and shift simply
Revolving around together or just individually
She smiles and is confident, seemingly
Though she is somehow shrouded in misery
She is the kind that’s kind hearted, open, yet a mystery
Trust? She doesn’t trust in trust that easily
Only If her heart must with emotion as a symphony
Her life is a motion colored in symphony
She is a fallen angel with broken wings mentally
Fallen from an angle in heaven intimately
Controls her life even in the dark frequently
She is like a puppeteer, ceo, etcetera, immediately
She shines, modern day Cleopatra in the vicinity
Pain? Not seen on the outside, not visibly
Though she is strong, strength is build upon memories
"Truth is limitless in its range; if you drop a 'T' and look at it in reverse, it could hurt."
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Re: W.A.P Ode To... (Wisdom And Poetry)

Postby Spyder » Jan 10th, '10, 00:12

sometimes i wonder if you actually read verses Pink
i mean you say YH is king of CW(no hate man you know i luv ya)

but for me Zu this was ight
it was wierd for me because things didnt rhyme directly which through off the flow for me
vocab was there which i love and i good message

deff not bad, but ive seen alot better from you bro :b:
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Re: W.A.P Ode To... (Wisdom And Poetry)

Postby Relapse.LP » Jan 10th, '10, 00:15

Spyder wrote:sometimes i wonder if you actually read verses Pink
i mean you say YH is king of CW(no hate man you know i luv ya)

but for me Zu this was ight
it was wierd for me because things didnt rhyme directly which through off the flow for me
vocab was there which i love and i good message

deff not bad, but ive seen alot better from you bro :b:

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Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: W.A.P Ode To... (Wisdom And Poetry)

Postby bullet_boy46 » Jan 10th, '10, 00:16

^^ yea but this is ight :worship: also i need you guys to help me and review my stuff...

and Zu keep it up.. no not just Zu...a whole variety ;) keep writing..
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Re: W.A.P Ode To... (Wisdom And Poetry)

Postby mcZu » Jan 10th, '10, 00:39

Like Pink said, this is poetry, and it rhymes quite good. Especially the flow, since I wrote it to a beat. But thanks for the comments and feed everybody, I apreciate it. :b:
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Re: W.A.P Ode To... (Wisdom And Poetry)

Postby Relapse.LP » Jan 10th, '10, 00:45

Great imagery. :y:

Probably my favorite out of the series so far, with maybe the slight exception of the first one. :b:
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: W.A.P Ode To... (Wisdom And Poetry)

Postby Spyder » Jan 10th, '10, 01:02

not tryin to shoot the piece down by accusing pink of liking it under false pretense
just questioning her on all of her posts in CW

but i do like it homeboy :y:
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Re: W.A.P Ode To... (Wisdom And Poetry)

Postby mcZu » Jan 13th, '10, 13:33

Now now, don't fight ppl. Thanks Spydie, Relapse and Pink. I aprreciate it.
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Re: W.A.P Ode To... (Wisdom And Poetry)

Postby Fa-Q » Jan 13th, '10, 15:08

Looks good Zu...I kinda got a slow vibe...a stop and go flow on it in my head..I have know idea if that's what it really supposed to sound like but it flowed for me...good drop
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Re: W.A.P Ode To... (Wisdom And Poetry)

Postby classthe_king » Jan 13th, '10, 19:39

You showed me this before I think and you know i like it :y: Keep doing your thing
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Re: W.A.P Ode To... (Wisdom And Poetry)

Postby mcZu » Jan 14th, '10, 20:39

Thanks Fa-Q and Class. :b:
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