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Breakup

Postby gutawafang » Jan 13th, '10, 08:48

took me 15 minutes. Dedicated to a friend of mine who jsut broke up.

Written to this beat. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UNN-zhD1 ... re=related

Pretty random. :D

Loving you too much that I'm doing everything you tell me to
I don't know why you told me that it's been hell for you
When I yell for you, you don't even look back anymore
All I see is lies and I don't see the facts anymore
I stood still, like a loyal dog, oh yes I did
Till the rain poured, and the weight test my shit
Thunder and lightning, just what the fuck I did?
What have I done to deserve fucking nuts like this?
I'm sick of writing poems on a paper absorbed
In rainwater, and all the words they dissolved
Vanish, just like evaporation
Writing lyrics for evaluation
Do you even know that I'm still waiting for you?
The rain is like applause and without further ado
I present the end to this futile relationship
This is how I say goodbye cuz my patience slipped
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Re: Breakup

Postby macdaddy019967 » Jan 13th, '10, 10:52

damn thats alot of patience...
nice Guta i felt that way about some girl i actually had feelings for....
i feel this very emotional piece :y:
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Re: Breakup

Postby mcZu » Jan 13th, '10, 11:34

Nice piece Guta, rhyme scheme could be upped though, it's lacking some wordplay as well. But the imagery, vocab and way of expressing yourself are good. Keep it up, good job Guta.
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Re: Breakup

Postby gutawafang » Jan 14th, '10, 04:46

Thanks a lot Macdaddy and McZu. :D
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Re: Breakup

Postby Edge » Jan 14th, '10, 09:17

good shit man, i read this before and ment to feed it... i liked the multis and flow and what u were saying in it... :y:
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Re: Breakup

Postby gutawafang » Jan 14th, '10, 10:38

Edge wrote:good shit man, i read this before and ment to feed it... i liked the multis and flow and what u were saying in it... :y:

Thank you man. :happy:
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Re: Breakup

Postby Spyder » Jan 14th, '10, 23:32

you and i have the same likings for beats :shifty:


i liked it bro, good shit very strucualy nice piece :y:


like that beat :shifty:
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Re: Breakup

Postby gutawafang » Jan 15th, '10, 01:04

Spyder wrote:you and i have the same likings for beats :shifty:


i liked it bro, good shit very strucualy nice piece :y:


like that beat :shifty:

WORD. :shifty:

Haha. Thanks a lot man. :shifty:
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