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Never rhyme just to rhyme, or run with scissors :)

Postby Yah-hah » Jan 14th, '10, 16:52

Love ya spyder (no homo) :sweating:

Welcome ladies and gentlemen come watch the lion rest inside,
Oh wait no it's a wolf and he's rhyming just to rhyme,
He's flyin testin time see that one rhymed unecesarily,
Like oh yeah I got the bullets firing through the barrel see,
Come on down and take yourself a closer look,
See straight down the chamber get a little closer, look,
See that little thing coming in a split second,
That is my excuse to use when I get reckless,
This isn't a Spyder diss just gettin my point across,
Stabbin the heart of Dracula with my pointed cross,
Wait, hold up a sec since when did Dracula get in the verse,
Well since I started draggin ya to get into my hearse,
Fire-breathin I'ma dragon brah does that count as wordplay?
See I switched it up used draggin a different way than the first place,
If I say my rhymes "impeccable" call me a bird with no beak,
Does that count as a punch if so I did it with no sleep,
Just something from the top but ask yourself if thats me,
Oh wait how could you ask youself something that you should've asked me,
Wait was that a multi too damn I swear I'm tryin to stop,
Um.....I'm sittin down on my bed and I'm drinkin soda pop,
And now I'm dancing drop down low into a shoulder pop,
Fuck my bad guys uh writing on my keyboard,
The concept of this sucks uh something something core,
Blah blah blah insert a dope punchline,
No more multis I promise on my spine,
See my flow is awesome without thes damn syllables,
See all the wordplay like lalalalala......um.... syllables?
Damn the last few bars with no multis in my verse,
That was harder to come up with than wat I had in the first.
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Never rhyme just to rhyme, or run with scissors :)

Postby Tomega » Jan 14th, '10, 17:00

i like it. flow is very good, nice rhymes.

but you say "wait" a little too much

overall: very good job :y:
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Re: Never rhyme just to rhyme, or run with scissors :)

Postby Yah-hah » Jan 14th, '10, 17:01

Thanks man idk if your seen any of my stuff but I was really just makin fun of some people saying i force my multis and just a little play around track. check some of my other stuff to see how it really is lol
Thanks for the feed though homie
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Never rhyme just to rhyme, or run with scissors :)

Postby Spyder » Jan 14th, '10, 23:28

:coffee: :shakehead: :unsure: :sweating: :smoking: :flutter:


this didnt force multies :o

do that with your other pieces ;)
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Re: Never rhyme just to rhyme, or run with scissors :)

Postby Fa-Q » Jan 15th, '10, 01:59

Lol Jus I like that fire breathing line...so is this a diss? Or what
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Re: Never rhyme just to rhyme, or run with scissors :)

Postby Yah-hah » Jan 15th, '10, 14:22

Naw was just messin around after seein the multis are overated thread. Not takin any shots just sayin my mind
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Never rhyme just to rhyme, or run with scissors :)

Postby Yah-hah » Jan 16th, '10, 06:42

IDk who the fuck cares lol just wats on my mind
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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