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Fa-Q - Aint No Sunshine (Complete)

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Fa-Q - Aint No Sunshine (Complete)

Postby Fa-Q » Feb 14th, '10, 11:15

Have fun being a bitch for the rest of your life, don't git hit by a car :wave:

Ain't no sunshine when she's gone,
It's not warm when she's away,
Ain't no sunshine when she's gone,
and she's always gone too long,
anytime she goes away,
Wonder this time where she's gone,
wonder if she's gone to stay
Ain't no sunshine when she's gone
and this house just ain't no home anytime she goes away,

Aint no sunshine, when she's gone, grey clouds hide the sky,
Aint no sunshine, when she's gone,
Darkness shrouds pride, and I try,
To recooperate, but she's already gone,
Stumble, hit the floor, I call, ready for dawn,
Aint no sunshine, when she's gone,
I ask my soul to partake, in such heartache,
But it says,
Aint no sunshine, when she's gone,
Aint no sunshine, when she's gone,
And she's gone, so she again frees a song,
From the inner depths of my soul, she forces me to write of her,
Aint no sunshine, when she's gone,
She forces me, yet I still fight to love her,
Aint no sunshine, when she's gone,
My nose, is tickled by the traces of her perfume,
I rush to bed, for dreams of her like races of a curfew,
Aint no sunshine, when she's gone,
She left my heart in a million and one pieces,
Aint no sunshine, when she's gone,
Aint no sunshine, like the sun ceases,
Aint no sunshine, when she's gone,
She was my pillow, that helped my head rest,
She stole my heartbeat like I have a dead chest,
She was my heart beat, now its just hard to speak,
Plus,
Aint no sunshine, when she's gone,
And here I sit, twilight beggin each my eyes sees the dawn,
But,
Aint no sunshine, when she's gone,
The sun ray, is fleeing, and runs away,
Aint no sunshine, when she's gone,
Aint no sunshine, when she's gone,

Ain't no sunshine when she's gone,
It's not warm when she's away,
Ain't no sunshine when she's gone,
and she's always gone too long,
anytime she goes away,
Wonder this time where she's gone,
wonder if she's gone to stay
Ain't no sunshine when she's gone
and this house just ain't no home anytime she goes away,

Aint no sunshine, when she's gone,
The feeling in my finger tips have gone away,
Aint no sunshine, when she's gone,
Aint no sleep tonight, staying up waiting for dawn today,
Aint no sunshine, when she's gone,
And when the sun comes up, slips over horizon,
I'm gonna think of her, lips and her eyes again,
Aint no sunshine, when she's gone,
Only darkness everyday,
Aint no sunshine when she's gone,
I watch my carcass decay,
Aint no sunshine when she's gone,
I'm dead inside, alone without her, which I said in pride,
Aint no sunshine when she's gone,
Aint no sunshine like it fled and died,
Aint no sunshine when she's gone,
We aint speakin again, all because of that long weekend,
Aint no sunshine when she's gone,
The sunshine left with my sense of taste,
My sense of feel, like my finger prints erased,
Aint no sunshine when she's gone,
She made my heart warm, loving her was an artform,
Aint no sunshine when she's gone,
But the part for loving her, she that part's torn,
Aint no sunshine when she's gone,
Her lips and eyes, all they do is hypnotize,
Her hips and thighs, all they do is hypnotize,
Aint no sunshine when she's gone,
She grabbed my heart out my chest, stuffed it in Davey Jones locker,
Killed me, slowly, and expect my achey bones to talk to her,
Aint no sunshine when she's gone,
As she walks away, all she does is tease her pawn,
Aint no sunshine when she's gone,
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Re: Fa-Q - Aint No Sunshine (Complete)

Postby GoodGirlsGetGutted » Feb 14th, '10, 11:21

I like this a lot. It reads like poetry with a prominent leitmotif. It lets the reader feel your pain.
Do to others whatever you would like them to do to you. This is the essence of all that is taught in the law and the prophets.
-Matthew 7:12

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Re: Fa-Q - Aint No Sunshine (Complete)

Postby Fa-Q » Feb 14th, '10, 13:37

Thanks G4 yea it was supposed to be like a repetitive statement for more of a poetic type song than a rap song...I'm looking for a beat that can shape it....but just like when I masturbate...I'm coming up empty handed
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Re: Fa-Q - Aint No Sunshine (Complete)

Postby GoodGirlsGetGutted » Feb 14th, '10, 13:43

Fa-Q wrote:just like when I masturbate...I'm coming up empty handed

I normally don't like to make meaningless posts... but I'll make an exception this time to compliment that particular sample of delightfully piquant wit.
As you're the proprietor of such wit, I am forced to congratulate you.
Do to others whatever you would like them to do to you. This is the essence of all that is taught in the law and the prophets.
-Matthew 7:12

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Re: Fa-Q - Aint No Sunshine (Complete)

Postby Fa-Q » Feb 14th, '10, 21:50

Hahah ok G4...
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