BEat cha

[tjb]

my mind works in quirks, an flirts with ideas
itd hurt me to be ya, so i pretend not to see ya
step on you like dirt, squash ya like ham between pita
wash you away like new orleans, pouring, like my name was katrina
ill W-W-E ya,so quick change my name to cena
im sick, my aimes to beatcha, the game of a fuckin demon
an this ain't no duck hunter no call of duty either
i fuck ya like cunts or with your mind on either
give you a reason, to go insane in your membrane
join clown posse an put the 1st inital to there name [ I ]
initially i was just gonna put you to shame
but now im gonna leave you like a stain
blood, now the only substance that remains
now that my guns have done, run through ya like a train

[Spyder]

not bad, nice concept and some alright metas in there
id work on the muties a bit and make the rhyming a little more complex

but keep droppin

[tjb]

will do