Breaking Through The Surface

[classthe_king]

Rough draft, please feed so I can make it perfect haha

A lot of people think that this rappin’s a joke
But I’m dead serious with this craft that I’ve wrote
I keep the dream alive cause I’m graspin to hope
And if you feed me some lies get stabbed in the throat
I’m laughin at those now actin so friendly
When just recently it seems I had you against me
I’m sick of being in this twisted dance
What about the last four years hoe, you missed ya chance
They all try to trip me up but I will keep steppin
Cause I had to walk through hell to finally reach Heaven
These lessons were learned but had a cost within
I slept through many cold nights and lost some friends
The pain I’ve felt is insane I’ve dealt
With so much bullshit but I’ve remained myself
I finally got my angel and was given my wings
So I don’t have to close my eyes and hope to live in my dreams

[DƎRDYPK]

#Based

I can feel it bro
I love that...real good stuff

bless you

[Willy]

you don't really write a craft,
im dead serious with this pen and "pad that i hold"
or if you toy with the craft line but i'm not sure if it 100 percent makes sense
otherwise it was good

[classthe_king]

Rapping is a craft, and I write it.

[Willy]

Now use it in context. Rapping is a craft, and you wrote it.
It doesn't quite line up imo, but its whatever.

[Solace]

Thought that was pretty well written, now I finally know why you're always listening to that goddamn beat lol. Keep at it, you should show me this stuff more often (you know I don't peep CW).

[DƎRDYPK]

omg bro im writing to this beat right now
so based
woo woo swag
wanna collab? or not?...hit it to me my homie
let's shut shit down !

[Ka0t1c]

i liked it, not sure where you could improve cuz i followed the flow very well and enjoyed it, maybe make it a longer story.

[classthe_king]

Thanks bro, this is going to turn into a 32, I'll post the second 16 when I write it.

I fixed this a little bit though

[Enimee]

i liek it def. got some emotion behind and and i feel like u got the message across well nice vocab and good multis and inner rhyme schems ,dope drop man