Xmas rhyme: December 25th

[4D]

A rhyme I wrote a few years ago about Christmas day.

December 25th

I can`t wait to present the presents that are presently in hidden places,
Under the tree, the wonderful glee beaming on my children’s faces,
Smiles bright, a years highlight, great fine sight on Christmas Mornin’,
The little Lady Stacey, Scott the tot and the biggest kid is Jordan,
This is a little chapter about little whipper snappers rippin’ wrappers,
One’s still in pampers, filled with laughter crackin’ Christmas crackers,
Gifts of tractors, remote control cars, robots, dolls ‘n bikes ‘n lots besides,
No wishes were ridiculous to mister Nicholas no matter what the size.
Glossy eyed, I watch in pride and ask them “What did Santy Bring?”
Psyched with delight they cry a reply “He didn`t forget any thing!”
A Queen and happy King are Mammy and Daddy singing festive tunes,
Amidst the noise of new toys and two boys I suddenly get the fumes,
The smell of food, my heart lifts at the thought of carrots and parsnips,
Stuffing mouths with stuffing, sprouts and turkey ‘n’ ham regardless,
While the hardships of darkness and wind and rain hit the window pane,
A day to treasure in a year of pressure, a day of pleasure with no pain,
I hope they always recall days like this and remember the plenty gifts,
‘Cause if any day’s worth remembering it’s December the twenty fifth!

[MC Anonymous]

A rhyme I wrote a few years ago about Christmas day.

December 25th

I can`t wait to present the presents that are presently in hidden places,
Under the tree, the wonderful glee beaming on my children’s faces,
Smiles bright, a years highlight, great fine sight on Christmas Mornin’,
The little Lady Stacey, Scott the tot and the biggest kid is Jordan,
This is a little chapter about little whipper snappers rippin’ wrappers,
One’s still in pampers, filled with laughter crackin’ Christmas crackers,
Gifts of tractors, remote control cars, robots, dolls ‘n bikes ‘n lots besides,
No wishes were ridiculous to mister Nicholas no matter what the size.
Glossy eyed, I watch in pride and ask them “What did Santy Bring?”
Psyched with delight they cry a reply “He didn`t forget any thing!”
A Queen and happy King are Mammy and Daddy singing festive tunes,
Amidst the noise of new toys and two boys I suddenly get the fumes,
The smell of food, my heart lifts at the thought of carrots and parsnips,
Stuffing mouths with stuffing, sprouts and turkey ‘n’ ham regardless,
While the hardships of darkness and wind and rain hit the window pane,
A day to treasure in a year of pressure, a day of pleasure with no pain,
I hope they always recall days like this and remember the plenty gifts,
‘Cause if any day’s worth remembering it’s December the twenty fifth!

I love love love love love!!!, to read your writing! You are sick with the rhymes, nuff said.
excellent job 10/10

[James R.]

4D spits in 19 dimensions I swear to God. Dope shit man.

[Solace]

Damn. That was just...Damn.

[Rain Matrix]

You lead by example man... I literally just felt like I was with you on Christmas morning
this had an excellent use of detailed imagery and a sick rhyme scheme too

[Ka0t1c]

Excellent, thanx for putting this up, i enjoyed this a lot, very good, 95/100 (haha)

[°[~CHR!$~]°]

Glossy eyed, I watch in pride and ask them “What did Santy Bring?”
Psyched with delight they cry a reply “He didn`t forget any thing!”

I hope they always recall days like this and remember the plenty gifts,
‘Cause if any day’s worth remembering it’s December the twenty fifth!

two faves parts
but cant deny that the whole thing was not from this earth
great GREAT read

[Arabian Shady]

You lead by example man... I literally just felt like I was with you on Christmas morning
this had an excellent use of detailed imagery and a sick rhyme scheme too

my thought exactly!
allways said it , 4d's the best story teller in this bitch hands down, no competition wat so ever
wiked stuff bro
Peace

[4D]

Thanks a million people. I honestly feel this is one of my best rhyme's, and it's great when it get's such nice feedback. Warms the cockles of my heart, much appreciated fellas!!

[neversnooze]

4d you brought out a great visual of christmas with a great flow.

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[Kez]

4D

It made me laugh, because it's just so not the subject matter for rap


But you made it work


Sorry but the worship emoticon is justified here.

[Ka0t1c]

A rhyme I wrote a few years ago about Christmas day.

December 25th

I can`t wait to present the presents that are presently in hidden places,
Under the tree, the wonderful glee beaming on my children’s faces,
Smiles bright, a years highlight, great fine sight on Christmas Mornin’,
The little Lady Stacey, Scott the tot and the biggest kid is Jordan,
This is a little chapter about little whipper snappers rippin’ wrappers,
One’s still in pampers, filled with laughter crackin’ Christmas crackers,
Gifts of tractors, remote control cars, robots, dolls ‘n bikes ‘n lots besides,
No wishes were ridiculous to mister Nicholas no matter what the size.
Glossy eyed, I watch in pride and ask them “What did Santy Bring?”
Psyched with delight they cry a reply “He didn`t forget any thing!”
A Queen and happy King are Mammy and Daddy singing festive tunes,
Amidst the noise of new toys and two boys I suddenly get the fumes,
The smell of food, my heart lifts at the thought of carrots and parsnips,
Stuffing mouths with stuffing, sprouts and turkey ‘n’ ham regardless,
While the hardships of darkness and wind and rain hit the window pane,
A day to treasure in a year of pressure, a day of pleasure with no pain,
I hope they always recall days like this and remember the plenty gifts,
‘Cause if any day’s worth remembering it’s December the twenty fifth!

Remember this?????

[Willy]

very fun to read,

great job and merry christmas