2011 Blah Blah.

[RealSickLindley]

So..


Please believe us, they envy procedures,
Of bleeding the needed 'til they see them needless,
Seeking Jesus, but then mistreat believers,
So feeding the leaded with their belief conceited,
Steeped in fevers, assembly of seizures,
They're pleading 'treat us', to be disease beaters,
Tease the readers, with soul free Biebers,
Then repeat the deleted 'til the weak stay seated,
Reeks of grievers, warning be heeded,
Start speaking sleepless, seek what's beneath us,
Leak the keepers, cut free the heated,
Just stealing the reapers, feeling dead to defeated,
Cease the litres, drown the meek from fetus,
Sad bleeping leaders, PR's get to be the preachers,
Streets Visicious, just heaped with creatures,
We're only beating teachers never free to teach us..

[Fa-Q]

You'll need a link of feedback, bruh

[RealSickLindley]

http://www.forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=104711&p=1457864#p1457864

Sorry, i'd not put much down, forgot about that rule.

[WakeUpShow]

I really liked your rhyme schemes, but the verse seemed to almost drag on

[RealSickLindley]

I really liked your rhyme schemes, but the verse seemed to almost drag on

It was only a 16, so it must have been cos it had the same sound throughout.

[ilovebender.com]

So..


Please believe us, they envy procedures,
Of bleeding the needed 'til they see them needless,
Seeking Jesus, but then mistreat believers,
So feeding the leaded with their belief conceited,
Steeped in fevers, assembly of seizures,
They're pleading 'treat us', to be disease beaters,
Tease the readers, with soul free Biebers,
Then repeat the deleted 'til the weak stay seated,
Reeks of grievers, warning be heeded,
Start speaking sleepless, seek what's beneath us,
Leak the keepers, cut free the heated,
Just stealing the reapers, feeling dead to defeated,
Cease the litres, drown the meek from fetus,
Sad bleeping leaders, PR's get to be the preachers,
Streets Visicious, just heaped with creatures,
We're only beating teachers never free to teach us..

Nice words, good flow, I like it.