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just a 4 line rhyme

Postby titan23 » Jan 9th, '11, 05:51

im equivalent to twelve pounds of dynamite
you couldn't stop a freight train goin 90 at night
so why you tryna bring me down on this beautiful night
iim so high up in the sky you'll need your b-lurs for the sight

something that just popped in my head and i wanted to right it down

oh and say "b-lurs" as "blurs"
i guess it can be like it's blurry if im so far away, and b-lurs as binoculars are need to see me
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Re: just a 4 line rhyme

Postby Emadyville » Jan 9th, '11, 06:19

not bad, surprised in 4 lines you used the rhyme of night twice tho :confusion:
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Re: just a 4 line rhyme

Postby titan23 » Jan 9th, '11, 06:34

haha i know, it's not very creative/different. it's a bit repetitive
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Re: just a 4 line rhyme

Postby mdemaz » Jan 9th, '11, 06:35

It's still pretty dope though...I'm just glad people want to express themselves in these times of struggle.
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Re: just a 4 line rhyme

Postby titan23 » Jan 9th, '11, 06:53

thanks bruh
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