depressed

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Maybe when im famous you will start to call
Punch the wall, now my bloods on the apartment wall
I guess that i was never in ur heart at all
The pain inside grows as the rain starts to fall
I cant even walk, so now i got to craw
To the medacine cabnit, and than i pop 'em all
Tears run down my face and than i start to bawl
I miss the days when we would shop the mall
We used to be so close, but now ur distant
Now im missin, you and i want u back this instant
Drinks at the bar, than we go bowling, hand holding
Now are relationship is folding, i need consoling
Head back to the apartment after we got some dinner
I guess i had to lose her, to see im not a winner

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Hey man, you probably haven't been around in a while but there's a new rule that you have to feed another person's work before you can post your own thread. Just an FYI.

This is very remeniscent of "Deja vu". Your flow / rhymes are a tad basic, but they're decent. Your content is good, though. I would work on trying to word things more artistically, instead of just saying them straight out.

Decent piece, though. Stay up.

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Hey man, you probably haven't been around in a while but there's a new rule that you have to feed another person's work before you can post your own thread. Just an FYI.

This is very remeniscent of "Deja vu". Your flow / rhymes are a tad basic, but they're decent. Your content is good, though. I would work on trying to word things more artistically, instead of just saying them straight out.

Decent piece, though. Stay up.

Thanks for the feed and I didn't know that. How could u tell the flow how I want it spit though?