Mark Of A Tyrant

[MikeNUFC]

I usually write to concepts and never really write bravado tracks, so some feed on this would be nice. I had fun writing it anyway


I got the eye of a tiger and the heart of a lion
And when I'm rocking the mic, you'll feel the mark of a tyrant
Start to hear rhyming that sounds smart when I'm miming
This is art in his prime... and I'm primed to make art
Fuck climbing the charts, I'd rather be rhyming with Starks
Cus I have no desire to rhyme for blind fucking tarts
Don't need time to recharge cus the flying of sparks
From my mind (...) can give the fucking mic it's own heart
My writing's so sharp, my blunt pencil'll stab you to death
And my rhymes are so strong, you'll use my pad as a vest
This is rap at it's best, you stay cashing your cheques
You're a fad and a mess and show a lack of respect?
I'll school you so bad, it'll leave sat back at ya desk
Sad and depressed and when I come with massive effect
I'm such an ill rhymer I make G Rap look a mess
Turning 'Road To The Riches' to 'Path To His Death'

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[classthe_king]

That was pretty sick, rhyming was great and the flow was awesome to read. Lyrics wise it was pretty ehh, but you said, you were just having fun.

[VenomBlackViper]

This was dope, I especially liked the last line. When I read it in a English accent the second time around it flowed & rhymed alot better.

[Master Chief]

You definitely have quality rhyming. But, the only thing that kinda bothers me are rhymes like these:

Cus I have no desire to rhyme for blind fucking tarts
Don't need time to recharge cus the flying of sparks
(...)From my mind can give the fucking mic a damn heart

"Damn" throws of the flow and it sounds awkard. "Fucking" throws it off too. I suggest you find words that fit better in those places.

The rest was excellent rhyme-wise and flow-wise. Content-wise, you know...it's nothing mind-blowing but it's good for what it is, a bragging rap. The last line was real witty too.

[MikeNUFC]

Cheers for the feed, guys

MC - Although I agree the word choice is hardly exceptional (i'd probably change it to "mic it's own heart"), it doesn't throw the flow off at all for me.

Thanks though

[Innovation]

Always enjoy reading your verses and this wasn't an exception.

Awesome verse, structured well, flowed well and the rhyming was solid throughout.

[MikeNUFC]

^

I swear whenever I post a piece I think it's good, then I read it later and think it's shitty.

[ChristinaE12]

^

I swear whenever I post a piece I think it's good, then I read it later and think it's shitty.

You're crazy if you think these pieces are shitty.. What is good on here to you then? You're definitely one of the top CW's on here.

[MikeNUFC]

You're crazy if you think these pieces are shitty.. What is good on here to you then? You're definitely one of the top CW's on here.

Well, shitty was probably hyperbole but I'm always critical of my own stuff (that includes anything) and always think I could have made it better when I look back (guess that's the typical pessimistic Brit within me!)

but thanks, it's appreciated