Ego - You

[mdemaz]

Beat: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BmgXBqjChwg
Geno Feed: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=126371
Alieus Feed: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=125784

[Geno]
I think I'm gettin' sick of love - addicted like the shit's a drug,
Silent words and bitter hugs are things that start to billow up,
We're hollow slaves to bottled rage, it's time to just let it erupt.
My mind has ended up corrupt, with images of misdemeanors,
With memories that I can't fix and those I wish were cleaner,
But I still can see 'em, and they haunt me night and day,
If I told you what I'm really feeling, things mighta changed
But I noticed right away that you wanted me to blame myself,
So you could become guilt free and ditch me on your way to hell,
The pain you caused - you've made it felt, but I'll expose your secret life,
Your reign is gone and in a drought, now we all know the cheating type,
Saying you just sleep at night, but really you're behind my back,
All I do is give to you, and love you more than writing tracks,
I'd take time and wind it back to when you showed me respect,
But I can't, so I'll have to settle with a hole in my chest.

[Chorus - Alieus]
You rose me up despite my discourage to fight
you showed me to stay true even when I became blue
you said remain strong when I questioned my thoughts
you showed me what it meant to truly love you
even when I cried is it worth it to write
you were by my side, just birthing the light
to lead me on the road I stepped upon to
none except one was there, and thats you

[Alieus]
I wanna dedicate this song
To one who’s never hated on
An idea or a thought
That's created outta love
Created outta anger, “don’t hesitate the tongue”
You helped my levitation from
A loser, now I’m racin’ to the top
And I really rather keep this on anonymous levels
Cuz I don’t want any trouble, I’m on an honesty bevel
Let me talk of when you was offerin’ mentality temples
I thank God or the Devil, you been with through thick and lean
Liftin’ me as a mixed feeling bitched 16
With a cold life man, you was like my right hand
And I can’t describe the times spent when I vent
And how you and I meant, sometimes you was red headed
Sometimes you down and blue, blackened too
With an attitude but somehow we packed it through

[Chorus - Alieus]

[Alieus]
Always on my ear, you were always write when I would cower back in fear
How I laugh and sneer about my past experiences now that you are here
Knowin’ how I feel and what I wanted when
I felt lost and fret, always in my palmin’ hands
I got nothin’ else to get off my fuckin chest
But appreciation for you one of my bestest friends
By my side from now until death, I fuckin love my Pen

Ehh....A bit...Mushy...But the rhyming structures were perfect..Yo, I noticed you've been writing a lot of love stuff lately, what gives man?

[Man1x]

Good shit as always you two. I'll review this more in depth later.

[Mr.DGAF]

Good stuff as always.

It's really refreshing to see you guys step out of your comfort zone here. The typical top-notch rhyming and flow is still present while tackling a subject that I don't think I've seen you guys do before. And even with the topic of love, I don't get the feeling that it was too mushy or something, to the point where I would think that it wasn't something you guys would write.

[Mr.DGAF]

Menzo's verse was about his love for his pen btw ^

Thanks for the feed.

Damn, I didn't even notice until you said that. In that case, I like the track even more now than before. I just thought it was about a chick or something.

[Mr.DGAF]

Tbh, I think "You" is better than "End Of The Tunnel"

Yeah, I started feeding it then remembered that I think bumping a thread that's two or more months old is bad or something, so I didn't.

Basically all that was said was that Geno's verse was solid as always, though the verse for this one is better.


And Menzo's verse was good, but it's apparent how much he has grown as a writer since that peice. Not to say that it's a bad verse at all, because it isn't. You've just become a better writer since that spot.

[Man1x]

It was all dope I really don't see anything wrong. I still maintain ya'll need to record these. Geno had the upper hand as always, but Menzo I think your getting up and fast. Even though your verse wasn't the best I liked this part the most on the whole thing, I guess I liked the fast flow:
"I wanna dedicate this song
To one who’s never hated on
An idea or a thought
That's created outta love
Created outta anger, “don’t hesitate the tongue”
You helped my levitation from"

I thought that was dope with imagery and all bro
Good job Ego, can't wait to see more

A hit back would be appreciated: http://forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=126370