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Booo friggin Hooo

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Booo friggin Hooo

Postby _Steven_ » Apr 1st, '12, 13:11

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all i would do is lead you away,
and you wouldn't believe how I'm feeling today,
I'm feeling ashamed, a needle in hay,
I'm alone in this world and i need you to stay,
few days since we spoke and I'm feeling the strain,
I'm sorry i turned from a man to a teen, from the man of your dreams,
to a man that you see as a man who's a fiend,
cause i wanted more, i wanted it all,
so i can't blame you that you don't want me as yours,
now those words hurt and can't say its your fault,
so ill just maintain this pain and keep it contained in the vault,
i love you, i miss you, i can only be honest,
i wouldn't mess up again i give you a promise,
but a second chance i understand why you wouldn't give it,
its not fair on you to have to see and re live it,
the worse thing i did is throw away your friendship,
now everything we had appears to have ended.
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Re: Booo friggin Hooo

Postby Strictt Ame » Apr 2nd, '12, 07:23

Deep piece bro..the imagery was on fuckin point, even saw a couple nice metaphors in there..flow was solid..I can definatly relate to the shit your sayin here, been through some shit like that, keep ya head up though..shit will turn around, hell your names Steven, thats the best fuckin name there is (Im also Steven LMAO)..but keep at it, make the pen/keys bleed..mos def a good read, dont see why its gettin slept on though
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Re: Booo friggin Hooo

Postby _Steven_ » Apr 2nd, '12, 09:39

Thanks for the feed bro! Nice to see your still around! I appreciate the kind words! And yeah I dunno why it's slept on either haha!
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Re: Booo friggin Hooo

Postby Strictt Ame » Apr 2nd, '12, 10:21

People want hard punches, complex metas and wordplay..they dont take time to appreciate writtens with meaning and soul..some people do like me though..myself, Yah-Hah, Solace etc..
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