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Worry Free

Postby Words » Apr 10th, '12, 15:46

I feel good today. So here it is:

LOF: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=144410
Beat: (Wax & EOM- Music and Liquor) http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LaqdexG8c9A



Probably think you're clever, with dumbed down writtens.
Think you're the freshest ever, with wack-ass rhythms.
In my hand there's not a single fuck that is given.
Don't you know that true music is not cash driven.
I thought it's pretty obvious. Thought it was a given.
But you're just behind the times, judging by your carrier pigeon.
I'm acknowledging new-age technologies, going on rhyming sprees-
I don't sweat the petty things, and I don't pet the sweaty things.
I just put on my headphones, press play and start living free-
for the day. Naturally, Hakun-a-mattata is my philosophy.
I'm belittling the little things, and not taking from the Giving Tree.
Shout-out to Shel Silverstein, and that's the way I choose to be.
I'll be this way endlessly, even when we see sour scenes-
I'm so worry free. :8)

I don't worry about anything, just chilling. It's how I stay sane.
Need no help except maybe a cool picture in a frame,
for my eyes to aim. Maybe a plain so I feel no restraints.
I'm not saying I'm a saint, I just don't like seeing the pain.
Or feeling it either, that's why peaceful nature is my feature.
I'm a good guy most the time, not a demonic creature.
I just relax and take my time to unwind, rewind the rhyme
so I can play it back nice. I'd hate it if I were a mime.
Silent so, I could never speak thoughts that were mine.
If I couldn't do this shit, I wouldn't know how to pass the time.
I'd probably go to malls and go wait in lines,
Just to see what's at the end, and that's a sad existence.
Rhyming to me is naturally a thing you see. Intrinsic,
is this feeling I get when I spit this smooth as Bisquick.
Shit...I'm so worry free. :8)
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Re: Worry Free

Postby Words » Apr 11th, '12, 16:04

Bumping?
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Re: Worry Free

Postby ShAdYTiLIDie » Apr 12th, '12, 03:40

Nice piece man, I liked how you used the inners, you have that down pretty well. I liked it a lot man keep it up
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Re: Worry Free

Postby CrashBand » Apr 12th, '12, 13:16

Feel good track, the rhyming is pretty simple though.

Often one or two syllabe rhyming. Could try to incorporate multie-syllabic rhyming?
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