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Postby MuNxMuN » Jun 2nd, '06, 22:54

[verse 1]
this is dedicated to someone i've known forever
from the moment we met i never thought we'd be together
our interests and personalities contrast like day and night
but somehow we seem always to get a long alright
i listen to rap music and you listen to rock
you believe in god and i don't believe in him at all
you grew up in vegas and i grew up in the bay
you like to hangout at the park and i like the arcade
you live with many sisters and i live with a brother
your parents are lenient and mine are stricter then others
you don't mind failing school but i'd flip if i did
while you've commited non i've comitted a few sins
when i talk about anime you have no clue what i'm on
when you talk about sports i try my best not to yawn
sometimes i'm surprised that we even get along
we have many differences but nothing in common at all

[chorus]
ever since you left my life hasn't been the same isn't the same
i'm missing you everyday and the pain never fades away
but everytime i hear your name and this may sound cliche
i miss you more and i hope you won't forget me




i wasn't gonna post it but i really need opinions before i continue working on the second verse.....personally i think the chorus sux but i'm not worried about that right now :giggle:
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Postby MuNxMuN » Jun 2nd, '06, 23:20

thanks sarah and this is gonna be dedicated to one of my bestest friends that's going to be leaving me soon :'(


i wanna show it to him before he leaves but at the rate i'm going it's not gonna happen....i'm probably just gonna send it to him over the summer :(
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Postby MuNxMuN » Jun 2nd, '06, 23:40

yea he's moving houses :(
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Postby MuNxMuN » Jun 2nd, '06, 23:44

yea we still can but it's not going to be the same :( and i doubt i'll be able to see him since he's moving to utah which is like a 4 hour drive away :'(
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Postby MuNxMuN » Jun 2nd, '06, 23:54

you probably are trippin killa :p we kinda are close cause i've known him for a few years and we're almost always together :sweating:

it's gonna be hard losing another best friend but it's happened to me before..... :(
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Postby Lil Pimp Tell 'Em » Jun 3rd, '06, 00:52

:shocked: :shock: :) nice rhyme max :worship: :worship: :worship:

:thumbsup: ;)

um..bye bye maxs bestest friend :confusion: :unsure:
Its legendary status sittin behind this computer wiigga
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Postby MuNxMuN » Jun 3rd, '06, 03:11

Lil' PimP wrote::shocked: :shock: :) nice rhyme max :worship: :worship: :worship:

:thumbsup: ;)

um..bye bye maxs bestest friend :confusion: :unsure:


what happened to max sux huh? :whistle: :p thanks marker and my friend isn't on tr lmao..he doesn't even like rap music :giggle:
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Postby 4D » Jun 3rd, '06, 10:25

You should definitely finish this. Itt`s something i bet 95% of people can connect with. Sometimes people can be so different, with no common interests, yet, couldn`t imagine being with anybody else. Very Strong content, something I myself was thinking of writing about too!

FINISH IT!!


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Postby MuNxMuN » Jun 3rd, '06, 15:20

thanks fordie :happy: i'm gonna finish it.....i just hope it's not going to take a long time :sweating:
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Postby 4D » Jun 3rd, '06, 15:32

Yeah, i see you want to try and rush it and give it to him. You souldn`t do it at the expense of fuckin it up though. Either finish it until you`re content with it, or you could just give it as it is.

Shouldn`t rush it though
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Postby MuNxMuN » Jun 3rd, '06, 16:18

yea i want to get it done but it's hard for me to write stuff now i just don't want it to take months for me to write it :( it used to be a breeze for me to write stuff but now it's not and i blame it on my english teacher :giggle: i'm gonna finish it before i give it to him and not just as it is right now cause i still have to audio and all that fun stuff -__-
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