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dear god

Postby JMG » Apr 18th, '07, 05:15

ever since ive been interduced to fear
im been tryin to reduce the tears though the years
i attempt to get on track but i fail
my train of thought has been derailed
i feel this is denstiny i got the ability down
and if this isnt meant to be then kill me now
instead of fight in my bed at night
god can u shed some light will u ever care
i go out on a limb but the fruit is never there
but i dont wanna look at u to solve my problems
at all or stop em but its not my fault i got em
and every time i pray it seems u ignore it too
so tell me why i should go to church and worship u
i guess this worlds invisable cuz ive been though it all
i had to quit with school cuz i would just stare into the wall
or lay my head on the desk and just rested it there
pray for respect maybe a breath of fresh air
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Postby Inzanity » Apr 18th, '07, 05:21

dam that's deep. It's almost made me cry. I like the emotion in it. and it was almost as if I could feel wat u were feeling. My favorite line's were:

ever since ive been interduced to fear
im been tryin to reduce the tears though the years


i feel this is denstiny i got the ability down
and if this isnt meant to be then kill me now


and

but i dont wanna look at u to solve my problems
at all or stop em but its not my fault i got em
and every time i pray it seems u ignore it too
so tell me why i should go to church and worship u


those line's were dope
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Postby JMG » Apr 18th, '07, 05:25

thank u :flower:
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Postby B.A.D. » Apr 18th, '07, 06:04

nice read rite eire

cool thang son :smoking:
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Postby JMG » Apr 19th, '07, 02:48

thanks!
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