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fiery rhymez

Postby Flamez » Apr 24th, '07, 22:45

I'm an abrasive noxious individual human being Obliterating living things
verbally attacking burning you up with the heat i bring an adroit lyrical king
i fling words creating an enigma with my rhymez which is knotty
coming at you quick givin' sharp blows and kicks with karate
hittin ya weak body i got no debility i'm energetic and vigorous
a hardcore soldier full of different weapons whose rigorous
i'm battle tested hungry for blood in my city i'm number one
words come out my mouth like bullets outta machine guns


yep this is better than what i wrote yesterday lol :sweating: :happy:
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Postby Flamez » Apr 26th, '07, 03:09

any feed?
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Postby Flamez » Apr 26th, '07, 07:33

thanx for the feed Tru :happy:

and i took my time on this :sweating:
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Postby James R. » Apr 29th, '07, 22:37

Not bad, had some nice vocab in there. Flow was decent. It was solid, not spectacular, but good. 6.5-7/10 it would have scored better if it was longer and you kept up that rhyming
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Postby Flamez » Apr 30th, '07, 00:18

thanx for the feed man
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