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as i grow

Postby <VerbalTouch> » Oct 19th, '08, 03:41

Not Given a fuck about my curfew I'll stay out late just to shit on you
As i grew i changed my certain views and what i do grew wit a low ig
You thought I had a lose screw I think you really need to get a clue
Use to rap just look cool Now I rap just to try to get the message threw
As i grow I'll look at different views liven wit my uncle as a nephew
Doubt he had any clue on what i was on to im crin so bad i need a tissue
The tears go threw that so i grab two bitch ill never ever love you
All this talk about your crew make mes laugh i see you as a statue
about to make a move but you just set there like a fucking weirdo
mom im still hating you I try to tell you my pain you just say boo
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Re: as i grow

Postby Emadyville » Oct 19th, '08, 03:54

Your rhymes are as weak as djblues.
Menzo wrote:Its cuz you're dope and Daddy Dubs. No one fucks with that


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Re: as i grow

Postby <VerbalTouch> » Oct 19th, '08, 03:55

seriously fuck off i wasnt trying to pull off anything amazing
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Re: as i grow

Postby Emadyville » Oct 19th, '08, 03:57

Well in that case maybe just make it flow better, the rhymes were simple which is ok if that's what you were going for, but the flow just made it hard to read and less interesting.
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Re: as i grow

Postby Rain Matrix » Oct 19th, '08, 04:21

get it all out and u will get better
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Re: as i grow

Postby Solace » Oct 19th, '08, 04:26

Wasnt bad man. :y:
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