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NEW Urban Punk - Demonic Delusions

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NEW Urban Punk - Demonic Delusions

Postby Urban Punk » Nov 23rd, '08, 21:02

Just a few bar’s I wrote when I woke up the other night, It still needs work thought just looking to know what you guys think should I continue or not? Sorry about the cap’s :p

WOKE BY WERIEY SOUND’S, TEARY EYED AND TERRIFIED,
MY HEART START’S TO POUND, WHEN HIS FEET HIT THE GROUND,
TRYIN NOT TO BREATHE, I’M CLENCHIN ON MY PILLOW,
AN GASPIN FOR AIR,
SO I MOVED TO MY WINDOW,

JUST THEN...

I SEE-A-SHADY-SHADOW, CREEPIN UP THE STAIRS,
FREEKED OUTTA MY MIND, CUZ MY VISION INPAIRED,
HALF SLEEPIN, HALF AWAKE, WITHIN A DARK INFSTED PLAGUE,
NOT KNOWN WHAT TO DO, SCREEMIN “HELP I CAN’T MOVE!”

AN THE ROOMS BECOMEIN CRIMSON, LIKE A SEVERED OPEN CUT

THEN BOOM!

MY DOOR SLAM'S SHUT,
I've mastered numerology and big bang theology, Performed lobotomies with telekinetic psychology http://www.bebo.com/Devilville
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Re: NEW Urban Punk - Demonic Delusions

Postby Ka0t1c » Nov 24th, '08, 03:33

it's ok, it's good u got a topic for this, make it better and add more to it, it's pretty good i think :y:
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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