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Postby Rain Matrix » Dec 7th, '08, 23:27

motivated by Hunger and going Under I'm a potential Jumper
who looks over tha edge and Wonders what his life Will Be
feeling Guilty for wanting a Milli it's Silly
I'll be grinding to they Kill Me or I Drop Dead
whether by Hot Lead or Raw Sex I'm Stuck in my Ways
with Nothing ta Say to those Rushing to Graves
tha good Die Young so should I Run from tha bad Guys Gun
or Fire Back this Writers At a place where an Entire Track
is a way to Ice Yur Past once and For All
so I won't stumble Or Fall I'm far too Unique
spitting rhymes is Truly my Duty I'm as unRuly as a Jewel Thief
and I'm not after Rubies or a article in Newsweek
tho a diamond encrusted Uzi would make my haters Woozy
I'll be chilling with a blunt of Fruity in tha Jacuzzi
thinking them Boss Thoughts so my lyrics stay Top Notch
i's hard to keep a Low Profile when yur Oh So Wild
911's a number my Foes Won't Dial blame my Loco Style
I punish enemies so Wickedly it's become an everyday Activity
painting pictures Vividly while I light up rival mc's like a Christmas Tree
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Re: Random Verse

Postby Slim Zaddy » Dec 11th, '08, 15:26

it's good .. i liked it .. flow was off at some points , but rhymes were decent ,, and lyrically it's great .. so keep it up bro .. :y: 8/10
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z_em = Slim Zaddy = Zaid AQ which is my real name
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