missin emall

[tjb]

drop bombs, like flyin from a plane,
droppin from the sky, like the pitta patta of rain,
but think the rain as bullets, an ur soakin up the liquid pain,
cold like liquid nitrogen, frozen like composure, thts hung like a funeral
for a kid tht died wayyyy to young,
but u cant look to the past, look at kingdom come,
keep marchin on, with or, without a drum, the beat will keep you on,
keepp you believin, your day will come,
an if u start to step, an start to slip,
dont fret,know ull always have my hand to grip
never fall like on ice, like make it melt
like your heart when u lost em, like heartfelt

[Ka0t1c]

nothing makes sense, not even the title

[lilrossy]

^^Yeah wat he said^^. but keep tryin.

[MC Anonymous]

..... You should practice with multi's and smilies first, then move on the metaphors.
If you do this you will get better in no time, also work on structure.
Instead of writing like this;

I'll drop bombs on you
lyrically dismantle fools
with a nitrogen bomb ready to have an ignited fuse
cause' I'm to cruel

be like this;
I'm the illest lyricist in the buisness
solidified when no one has the heart to test this
I'm strapped like rambo, with infinite ammo
with my chest surrounded in definite camo

I hope you can get what I mean, have it look more clean for the reader to pick up ya flow.
Hope I helped!

[tjb]

thanx a lot

[MC Anonymous]

thanx a lot

You're welcome

[Solace]

nothing makes sense, not even the title