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Reaching Out

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Reaching Out

Postby Rain Matrix » Dec 21st, '08, 07:23

Alone and Lost as I Roam through Thoughts my mind tells me I'm the only Home u Got
so how come I'm on my Own Distraught trying to genetically alter a Clone to Watch

so I can Observe The Work A Verse Ya Heard but never Fully Grasped
more words I Won't Retract and like a pistol's action it Pulls Me Back

time to Aim It and leave a Brain Hit now no one know's where Rain Is
the Pains Quick as my quest to be Famous ends with a Statement

traveling down a One Way monday to Sunday and I can't Turn Around
the flames I spit will Burn Ya Now listen for yourself Confirm The Sound

of a Muted Scream in an Abusive Scene back when I was just another Useless Teen
chasing an Elusive Dream but only by Conclusive Means feeling like I was Looted Clean

am I Preparing to start Caring it's not so Apparent this life of mine feels Barren
music Blaring I'm Staring into space untill someones Dare Him to start Sharing
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Re: Reaching Out

Postby lilrossy » Dec 21st, '08, 12:44

i liked it, thought it was good. it flowed really nicely, it was good to read. & i think u have fulgurous vocab. nice work. :y:
"Too fatal, unable to crash
Sluts I introduce to anal call me a pain in the ass"
"Got hoes suspicious. Even one peg leg bitches
After I came, fucked em with they own leg
They ain't know the difference"
-Copywrite
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Re: Reaching Out

Postby Slim Zaddy » Dec 21st, '08, 17:21

it was nice . i like the way you rhyme words together .. everything was good .. flow nd lyrics were decent .. so keep it up .. pal .. good job :y:
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