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It Took So Long

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It Took So Long

Postby Rain Matrix » Jan 7th, '09, 19:00

when stress is all you know it's hard to Relax
I'm not eminem but I'll probably Relapse
to hell with a 9-5 cuz all I know is Rap
I'll guess we'll see if I can keep myself Intact
I gotta keep it together cuz I ain't turning Back
if I have to I'll destroy anything in my Path
my thoughts are my only enemy that's pretty Sad
the truth is all that matters as a matter of Fact
this movie in my head is starting to fade to Black
there's no rewind and I'm losing my sanity Fast
when the world changes around you, you have to Adapt
they want you to be a slave dying to hold some Cash
I don't sleep much I'm sure one day I'm gonna Crash
so before that happens I'll try to make an Impact
I don't fear the Aftermath of my Wrath on a Track
no more hesitation I ain't gonna cross that finish line Last
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Re: It Took So Long

Postby Slim Zaddy » Jan 7th, '09, 19:15

Rain Matrix wrote:when stress is all you know it's hard to Relax
I'm not eminem but I'll probably Relapse
to hell with a 9-5 cuz all I know is Rap
I'll guess we'll see if I can keep myself Intact


damn man it's dope really ,, i loved it man , rhymes and lyrics are great , flow is amazing and it's well structured . and i liked these lines they are dope .. keep it up man .. 9/10 .. gd job bro ..
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Re: It Took So Long

Postby Ka0t1c » Jan 8th, '09, 01:58

right on man
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: It Took So Long

Postby Emadyville » Jan 8th, '09, 11:57

Different rhyme scheme and structure then I'm used to reading from you, it was a good thing to see it switch up, good job :y:
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Re: It Took So Long

Postby Arabian Shady » Jan 8th, '09, 13:02

damn dude, message was crystal clear, i think that was a good peice of story telling
flow and structure was top notch, altho it was nuthing too comlex
all in all a wiked drop :b:
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Shit is BACKSTAGE,Cause the front page aint worth Kashmir and Palestine.
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Re: It Took So Long

Postby Kez » Jan 8th, '09, 20:19

I was happy to see you post somethin that actually flows well for a change.

Lyrics were kinda simple but got the message across and complimented the flow much better than your normal fare does.
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Re: It Took So Long

Postby lilrossy » Jan 9th, '09, 07:42

yeah man, wat everyone else said. thats was a great drop. nice work! :y:
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