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Postby MC Anonymous » Jan 16th, '09, 01:57

The second verse, watch me 'raise the bar' like steel workers
I'm the real burner, make you scream in more tones then tina turner
the meanest curser, a lyrical berzerker, twist and fire like matrix
my latest creations extract the information like DNA, so say this
I'm such a rapist, the way I penetrate virgin beats with heat
rip you up with my canine teeth, then rhyme with the elites
try to steal my rhymes, catch frostbite, leave you in the lost night
you know the cost right? one hundred million bucks for limelight
my rhymes tight, tighter then a vice grip on a virgin pussy
come and tempt me wussy, you can't spit this type of version loosely
I'll destroy all you bullies, and yes BITCH I'M TALKIN' TO YOU
our relationship is through, now see an outline of chalk on ya crew.
LMFAO@ Brittney, bitch looking worse than a chupacabra mixed with a broken down coyote. You're disgusting ugly, so ugly in fact, my brain simultaneously exploded while processing how bitterly grotesque you look. I would much rather stick ice picks into the walls of my cranium, then stick my dick into your quagmire of a clitoris. You're what would happen if a sperm whale mated with a Godzilla fish..


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Re: Verse

Postby Ka0t1c » Jan 16th, '09, 02:21

this is prolly your most down to earth hardest track everyone can understand 10/10... much improved :y: :y: :y:
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: Verse

Postby Solace » Jan 16th, '09, 02:24

Yeah^ i understood it all, it wasnt all too complex which was great. No words that i didnt know so i could comprehend what you were saying. Great job man :y: Could ya check out my other post "Random Shit"?
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Re: Verse

Postby Kez » Jan 16th, '09, 02:26

The lack of complexity made it easier to understand and allowed the hard punches to shine. Great stuff.
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Re: Verse

Postby MC Anonymous » Jan 16th, '09, 03:50

Thanks guys :y: :y:
LMFAO@ Brittney, bitch looking worse than a chupacabra mixed with a broken down coyote. You're disgusting ugly, so ugly in fact, my brain simultaneously exploded while processing how bitterly grotesque you look. I would much rather stick ice picks into the walls of my cranium, then stick my dick into your quagmire of a clitoris. You're what would happen if a sperm whale mated with a Godzilla fish..


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Re: Verse

Postby neversnooze » Jan 16th, '09, 04:49

it was a short verse something i didnt mind reading, overall it was well written, your are creative and can be lethal with words :p :y:
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Re: Verse

Postby MC Anonymous » Jan 16th, '09, 13:33

:flower: :flower: Thanks
LMFAO@ Brittney, bitch looking worse than a chupacabra mixed with a broken down coyote. You're disgusting ugly, so ugly in fact, my brain simultaneously exploded while processing how bitterly grotesque you look. I would much rather stick ice picks into the walls of my cranium, then stick my dick into your quagmire of a clitoris. You're what would happen if a sperm whale mated with a Godzilla fish..


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Re: Verse

Postby SajN » Jan 16th, '09, 14:31

This was great :y:

Not so BIG words, which made it easier for a guy like me to understand :y: Very nice drop
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Re: Verse

Postby James R. » Jan 16th, '09, 14:39

Dope as fuck. Not nearly as complex as usual and it really let your shit shine man. Great job.

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Re: Verse

Postby MC Anonymous » Jan 16th, '09, 18:28

Thanks dudes :y: :y:
LMFAO@ Brittney, bitch looking worse than a chupacabra mixed with a broken down coyote. You're disgusting ugly, so ugly in fact, my brain simultaneously exploded while processing how bitterly grotesque you look. I would much rather stick ice picks into the walls of my cranium, then stick my dick into your quagmire of a clitoris. You're what would happen if a sperm whale mated with a Godzilla fish..


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