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Re: Exposed? (Untitled ?)

Postby Solace » Jan 29th, '09, 02:19

I liked it, thought it could have been really great if it were structured better. Keep it up dude, last line was kinda funny. :y:
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Re: Exposed? (Untitled ?)

Postby Ka0t1c » Jan 30th, '09, 16:49

but I hate to seem rude and abuse
The news with what you confuse with truth, I mean Rakim ain’t god but he’s really close
And Tupac’s not alive an you think that he's a ghost, & Lil Weezy’s on hip-hop because cheesey shit floats


imo, that's when u started to get interesting, i see u got some potential to use better words to explain yourself in depth, you got the rhymes, just not properly used most of the time which can improve over time so keep droppin :y:
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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