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You droppin a duece and I aint said shit yet

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You droppin a duece and I aint said shit yet

Postby Purple23Haze » Jan 30th, '09, 19:29

You dropping a deuce and I aint said shit yet
Acting all cool but aint made the tongue stick yet
Think you smoked me But I aint a cigarette, yes
I’m retaliating again don’t correct me repent for your sins
Young people think they know everything old people are convinced
I be sitting here drawing all appalling calling my picture fallin’
Cause I’m all in I’m stalling to say why,
It may be because I just don’t know why
I, do though A fool cool rebelled shoed pose you aint my level
Dudes fold my poker face owned skill is shown watch your tone or get boned
what I’m saying is decaying bodies leave remnants of the Skeleton
Back to hell again I don’t care what I’ve been selling em’
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Re: You droppin a duece and I aint said shit yet

Postby Slim Zaddy » Jan 30th, '09, 19:35

it's cool . i like the concept , nd cigarette line .. you could have done better ,, work on your structure, you got the flow ..it's good .. gd luck bro :y:
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Re: You droppin a duece and I aint said shit yet

Postby Purple23Haze » Jan 30th, '09, 19:38

my flow just don't have structure I'm sorry I know thats a biggie with you guys I just don't write like that
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