crossed the line

[gutawafang]

Just some practice. took 15 minutes. i did this in class an hour ago.

at the sight of threats, I'll ride the shaft
if you bite my neck, i'll fight to death
and i'd like to say that i'm not okay
i said i'll ride away lest I'ma die today
i have a line to cross, a fucking mind is cross
shitty, i am lost, God, give me a sign to toss

so i throw you my middle fingers for you to consider
and they grow on you as they fuck you like Godzilla
why do i feel like this?
why am i still like this? emotionally fucked, i refuse to be like this
but i'm like this, i can't fight this
and forgive me, i might diss, i've never felt high like this

so hi, as long as i got a story to tell
i will story tell my hell and why the fuck i fell
flat on my face, fuck it, i lost the race
i crossed the finish line last, i literally lost my face

[James R.]

Good your practicing. This was ok, each section had it's own flow, but they looked separate to me so it didn't affect anything really. It's practice so I can't say much about pieces so short, but I would tell you to try to be a little more creative. Some of the lines were kinda corny and/or didn't make a TON of sense. Like the Godzilla line, it was ok, but it was a little cheesy especially since you're in Singapore lol. But also "fuck you like Godzilla" I mean I understand it's a super fuck, but you could have thought of something a little more creative I'm sure of it. Keep practicing man.

[gutawafang]

alright!!! I'ma keep practicing man! Thanks a lot. I feel soooooo honoured to receive feeds from legends like u james!

[Slim Zaddy]

actually as James said above , it's a good practicing ,, but i'm waiting for your creative drop .. i mean whole song .. so keep practicing as you can ,, and you're good in exposing your emotions ,, so keep it up bro ..

[gutawafang]

actually as James said above , it's a good practicing ,, but i'm waiting for your creative drop .. i mean whole song .. so keep practicing as you can ,, and you're good in exposing your emotions ,, so keep it up bro ..

hmmm. exposing my emotions? well, you're right man. i swear i'll keep practicing till i manage to drop a song. really, i will.

thanks z em!