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Postby gutawafang » Feb 2nd, '09, 10:01

I'ma thank you God for all you've done to alter my fate
For making better of my worst of mind state
I'm glad you was there for me when I ran that race
For all that's happened to me, God, I'm fucking amazed

I'm so proud you exist in this world that you created
I guess you won't care bout the issues we debated
But for all the things that I loved and hated
You still gave me chances when I patiently waited

God, this ain't just a letter, it's also a fucking confession
I wanna erase my fucking pain, and my fucking obsessions
Give me the strength to fight away the things that I've mentioned
And to fulfill my stupid motherfucking resolutions

Oh yeah, by the way, I'm still infatuated with beauty
Should you sent a Devil gangster now to come and shoot me
Instead you sent an Angel from the Heavens above
Thank you, God for giving me someone who shows me love.

I was feeling poetic... *sighs*...
I love you, Angel.
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Re: God.

Postby Slim Zaddy » Feb 2nd, '09, 10:04

it's great as a poetic . it's full of emotion ,, i do really loved it , the flow was there and the rhymes were great ,, this it dope .. 8.5 / 10 . god job ,, write more like this :y: :y:
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Re: God.

Postby gutawafang » Feb 2nd, '09, 10:05

YAY. Thanks a lot again, z em. I really appreciate you feed my rhymes. Really, thank you man!

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Re: God.

Postby James R. » Feb 2nd, '09, 15:01

Very good, very poetic, not so much a rap if you will, but a good post all the same. Great vibe and flow to the whole thing. Rhyming was decent as well. Good job.
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Re: God.

Postby gutawafang » Feb 2nd, '09, 15:02

James R. wrote:Very good, very poetic, not so much a rap if you will, but a good post all the same. Great vibe and flow to the whole thing. Rhyming was decent as well. Good job.


i'm so honored man! LOL. Thank you James R! :)
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