Slim

[gutawafang]

lol. i tried imagining this rap with "i'm back" beat. and fucking indeed it matches. it rocks man. i love this version. why dont you record?

[Slim Zaddy]

sounds pretty nice , i liked this one . but keepan eye on da structure ,, . keep writing ,,

[James R.]

The flow was EXTREMELY difficult to keep tabs on for me because the lines got really long towards the end (have I mentioned that as an issue to you before?) but it was very entertaining. Very creative, very Slim Shady-esque is you know what I mean. I think you did a good job with the imagery and you had some really nice multies in there. The rhyme scheme was a bit all over the place for my tastes though. I like experimenting with it, but I also like to keep some congruity throughout the piece, easiest way for me is to make sure I rhyme lines in 2's

Anyways good job man. It was a really enjoyable read. I'd like to hear it recorded.

[Almostlity]

lol cause I just mess around, i try to write 1 thing a day, i don't have a mic and am really just writing for fun

Month of Madness?