Battle My Enemies.

[MC Anonymous]

Lost focus, crying with tears of liquid rage
hit this page, with a fiery heart like a mage
the world revolves, as my life circulates
believe it, all you fuckers can do is circle hate
rewind my life, past all the fire and flames
it will take more then this to retire my name
crucified with spikes, my heart's in submission
I never did wrong, why did you start your decisions
to lable me, stomp on my jaw with a stigma boot
how much more can your verbal fuckin' trigger shoot
fury enticed me, I'm surrounded with my thoughts
I want to throw daggers, yet tears my eyes brought
Soft by nature, warm-heartedness melts the ice
even though my back is whipped way more then twice
For all those who hear my words, I apologize
for you have to live in a world filled with shallow lies

My glass heart, speaks softly through the mist
my mind's abyss, tells me to skew my wrists
twist them and break, that way the truth is lost
battling against myself for just a ruthless cost
telling myself, life is but a worthless cause
just a sadist looking on with his thirsty paws
a game, a pawn, my mind plays with no avail
a boat with burning bark, and torn up sails
born in hail, it seems as my life is frozen stiff
a guitarist, expressing life through spoken rifts
my pen's the sword, and I'll attack tonight
the time is right, now stand back and fight
through words by pen, fiery passion within
born without skin, without the fashion of sin
hell's fury is crystallized right into a ruby
and I'm here wearing the ring, easy and truly.

I have problems, so why do you amplify
my need to seclude myself and hide
living life without a cause, a maze with water
drowned silently, then get hazed and slaughtered
scarred by words, verbiage condensed inside
covered in pain because those scars are multiplied
by the words you put aside, and hurt me with
the pain that can't be erased with bursts of spliffs
shit, I've lived a life of misery, and due to this
the audience inside my mind just boos and spits
I quit, silently I'll slip into the land of digital
and count down my life, with oxygen intervals
buried without honor, blood drained from rocks
if you didn't want kids, you just gained a flock
my misery lives on, as long as this beat moves
it will stay inside your mind, as the heat grooves

[Solace]

Glad your back on your shit man, i hope that conversation we had helped you a bit. Good piece, all verses were good. Keep it up Anon

[gutawafang]

Perfect drop. I wanna hear you rap it out. I mean I can picture the success of this song. Everything flows smoothly. Great battl your enmies man. I love it.

Especially "my pen's the sword, and I'll attack tonight
the time is right, now stand back and fight"
That captivated me a lot.

Overall, this song inspires me.

[MC Anonymous]

Thanks guys, and yes Epiphany our convo helped me tremendously

[James R.]

Man I read some of this before on MSN and this is probably the best thing you've written. The multies were on point, the flow was on point, the lyrics were on point, the emotion was crazy man. I can feel you battling those demons on some real talk in this song and that's probably the best thing about it. This song was 100% real and 100% on point man. I loved every second of it. Great fuckin job. Glad to see you're still here. I hope our convo helped you through this.

[Ivy]

You've definetely been acerting yourself more, atleast you have in this piece. I can tell a drastic improvement. If you can keep improving like this overnight, you'd be up there with James and Maybe Don't jizz now just cause of that comment, you've still got a ways to go

[noel]

I am still reading your stuff- There is something about your words that just 'click' with me and basically I really love it (hence the flowers and waves above)!!

I hope you get something really worthwile out of this and I wish you the best!!

[Kez]

Loved it. Flow was rappable, lyrics were sick with you not over-doing the multis or over-complicating the lyrics and the concept was sick. This is probably your best so far in terms of effectiveness, because it's more easily readable to the average reader compared to your more complex shit you've done.

Glad to see you back Now record it

[MC Anonymous]

Thanks guys! This shit came straight from my heart. So it does me good when I see my work is not in vain.

[mcZu]

Thank god you didn't quit, this here is what I call a comeback. You had a dip, used the negative eneregy and turned it into fucking fuel now your flame is blazing like a olympic torch bro.
Sick ass lyrics, the in-depth of how you described your mental state there was on a genius level, flow was oke for an accappela. Don't know you gonna deliver this, but you should def record this.
You might wanna see if you leave it as 3 verses or trow in a chorus, a chorus would do great.
Anyways nice to see you got your hunger back, keep dropping this and goodluck with recording this, if you do so.

[MC Anonymous]

Thank god you didn't quit, this here is what I call a comeback. You had a dip, used the negative eneregy and turned it into fucking fuel now your flame is blazing like a olympic torch bro.
Sick ass lyrics, the in-depth of how you described your mental state there was on a genius level, flow was oke for an accappela. Don't know you gonna deliver this, but you should def record this.
You might wanna see if you leave it as 3 verses or trow in a chorus, a chorus would do great.
Anyways nice to see you got your hunger back, keep dropping this and goodluck with recording this, if you do so.

Thanks bro! One of the best feeds I've ever had!

[Purple23Haze]

Check those voices put them aside
Hold death to die with pride
Let the day ride be proud
The time is now!