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A Verbal that's Urkle

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Re: A Verbal that's Urkle

Postby Spyder » Feb 8th, '09, 01:57

sick dude, honestly nice vocab and complexity. you do very well when you rap about what you want where as myself a battler. propz 100% :y:
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Re: A Verbal that's Urkle

Postby James R. » Feb 8th, '09, 02:47

I really liked it. Rhyming and vocab were really on point here and everything else was solid as well. Nothing to complain about man. Good job.
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Re: A Verbal that's Urkle

Postby James R. » Feb 8th, '09, 03:03

^Hahahaha yeah man me too
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Re: A Verbal that's Urkle

Postby Slim Zaddy » Feb 8th, '09, 08:48

ya you impressed me here coleon , much improvements here ,, rhymes were sick and lyrics are great ,, i liked the concept though ,, and it flowed naturally , 9/10 ,, pretty gd job here buddy :y:
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