kind of a state of hip hop thing....

[spitz2]

i thought about this goin on ice cubes gangsta rap made me do it.

can someone tell me what the fuck has happened/
rappers so real but all'em fuckin suck at rappin/
always bout coke deals n everywhere they duffle baggin/
but they aint sayin nothin so we gotta muzzle mask'em/
people useda hustle to get some food pay/
now they tryna be fly as birds wearin blue j's/
no one even cares no more when they drop a new tape/
tryna get the cream but diss me for likin wu tang/
everythings virtually the same there aint no difference/
the more i hear this bullshit i start to get so sickened/
i no im not tossin dollas at the club for the hos strippin/
almost on the verge of quittin man im so tempted/
motherfuckers cant pick a title so they take another hustlers name/
make hey n day rhyme think they deserve nothin but the fame/
but it really goes without sayin but i think that it is such a shame/
we shold never let these motherfuckers touch the game/

i completely blanked out for the 5th n 6th bars...so i made sumthin else up.

[Slim Zaddy]

well it's not good or bad ,, lyrics were simple , beside rhymes , flow was off and on ,, at first it was good but then it's start to slow off to me , i like the way your thoughts are arranged , and i liked the concept though , it's was'nt bad, it's 7/10 ,, good try ,, keep writing man ,,

[James R.]

now they tryna be fly as birds wearin blue j's/

That was probably the best line in the song. Simple, but the wordplay there is fuckin HOT man.

I liked it. The flow was eh. The multies and rhyming were good. The concepts were good, some really fuckin sick (like the one above) the wordplay was average except for a few shining moments. It was a good piece man. You should drop more shit in here. You got potential.

[gutawafang]

I can't rap it out, due to different number of syllables at each line. But multi wise, you applied it quite well. Good punchlines like the wutang line you wrote there.

Overall, 6.5/10

[spitz2]

now they tryna be fly as birds wearin blue j's/

That was probably the best line in the song. Simple, but the wordplay there is fuckin HOT man.

I liked it. The flow was eh. The multies and rhyming were good. The concepts were good, some really fuckin sick (like the one above) the wordplay was average except for a few shining moments. It was a good piece man. You should drop more shit in here. You got potential.

yea, i originally had the rhyme as new j's.....but i thought about it n i was like "wait a minute, i can do sumthin with this here"