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Lyrical Genocide

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Lyrical Genocide

Postby Solace » Feb 7th, '09, 20:20

I've stood up for myself, I've gained a lot of enemies,
Always ready, attack steadily, there ain't no remedy,
For this energy, pathetic and despicable the victims,
Verbally rip their rectum as I recite several dictums,
Flesh wounds, severe scars, yet I am the cause,
I dig into your chest, pull back as I say "Fuck the law",
You can't handle me, I'm about as fact as gravity,
Humorous to consider battling me, go back to reality,
I spit venom, inject death, and just tear opponents,
Dissing without carnage's like missing a component.


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Last edited by Solace on Feb 9th, '09, 00:52, edited 1 time in total.
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Re: Lyrical Genecide

Postby MC Anonymous » Feb 7th, '09, 20:22

Pretty nice stuff here, 8/10 :y:
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Re: Lyrical Genecide

Postby Solace » Feb 7th, '09, 20:24

MC Anonymous wrote:Pretty nice stuff here, 8/10 :y:

Thanks MC :)
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Re: Lyrical Genecide

Postby Emadyville » Feb 7th, '09, 21:07

Nice rhymes, it was solid :y:
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Re: Lyrical Genecide

Postby mcZu » Feb 7th, '09, 22:06

A solid drop, rhymes were great, multies were there and the overall verse was way above average :y:
Nice drop, keep em comming :b:
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Re: Lyrical Genecide

Postby Solace » Feb 7th, '09, 22:12

Thanks guys I appreciate it!
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Re: Lyrical Genecide

Postby James R. » Feb 8th, '09, 02:36

I'd give it a 7/10

It's a very solid drop man. Nothing is really wavering. Flow is good, structure is good, rhyming is good, ideas are good, everything is good, just nothing great. Keep it up man.
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Re: Lyrical Genecide

Postby Slim Zaddy » Feb 8th, '09, 08:27

actually it was short and sweet , rhyming was good , flow was there, everything was good , 7.5/10 ,, gd drop , ,keep it up :y:
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Re: Lyrical Genecide

Postby Solace » Feb 9th, '09, 00:51

Thanks guys, ima keep trying to make something thats really good. Ill change the title too, @Coleon :y:
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