as much as i dislike you for trying to debate with me in a couple of topics,though i havent done nothing to you, i will comment on one of your works.
you rhymed well, in my opinion "been" and "men" not so much rhymed. your structure on this piece was well written, you used an almost exact syllables in each line. you have good writing skills and you do alot of studying before you write your piece. for example cuneiform is the earliest form of writing and its extinct.
nothing more to say 7/10