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Long Lines

Postby Rain Matrix » Feb 11th, '09, 04:38

why can't I Adjust to Love my hearts been Crushed Enough I guess my Luck is Tough
when I Fuck it Up my Blood does Rush it's Such a Drug I Just feel like Puffing Nugs

without any Restraints I Paint a Faint picture of this Pain that drives me Insane
I'm the one to Blame and Thank for this Deranged Claim of Shame in my Brain

no money in the Bank that doesn't Change I try to be a Saint but I can feel hells Flames
emotionally Drained I can't Explain this Game my mind draws a Blank and yet I Remain

steady Gripping Mics not knowing what Fictions Like so how is it that I'm still Missing Life
cut deep by a Hidden Knife my thoughts are Imprioned Right cuz I know I ain't Living Twice

you only get One Shot so before fates Gun Pops find the highest cliff and Jump Off
I've had it with the Dumb Laws feeling like a Bum Lost I decide to spark Some Pot
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Re: Long Lines

Postby Purple23Haze » Feb 11th, '09, 05:28

Oh shit Rain Matrix drops not basics hot shit lasek eye surgery I see it clear murder thee eternity wordly absurd thirsty and cursory is that a baby in the nursery!
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Re: Long Lines

Postby gutawafang » Feb 11th, '09, 05:59

you only get One Shot so before fates Gun Pops find the highest cliff and Jump Off
I've had it with the Dumb Laws feeling like a Bum Lost I decide to spark Some Pot

That's great. :y:
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Re: Long Lines

Postby Emadyville » Feb 11th, '09, 16:25

I thought the first, third, and fourth sets were dope, especially the third and fourth, but the other two I wasn't feeling, overall I enjoyed it :y:
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Re: Long Lines

Postby Ka0t1c » Feb 13th, '09, 04:40

pretty good... for a stoner! (Popeye laugh)
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: Long Lines

Postby mcZu » Feb 13th, '09, 22:06

Loved the flow, 'cause of the multies it flowed superb. Lyrical content was good aswell :y:
Nice job, I have no complaints :b:
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