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Battle Proven (Revised)

Postby Rain Matrix » Feb 11th, '09, 19:59

my Raps on the Attack and That's a true Fact lyrically I'll put a Mac to your Back
make your Vertebrae a Flying Disk what you Heard Me Say you'll be Dying Quick

chalk me up for a Murder Case ya Lying Bitch it's a One Eight Seven
something like a One Way Lesson that you don't Wanna Learn

it's like bleach On The Germs Extreme Death and your Teams Next
I'll leave your Dreams Wrecked when I say I'll tear into you I litterally Mean Flesh

similar to a Knife with Teeth you could say I Like to Beef if you value your Life Retreat
cuz when you Fight with Me It'll be Game Over you'll know that Rains Colder

as you feel your Brains Smolder like a Lava Pit that took a Shot Of Liq
I downed pure Vodka Pissed now your Thin Innards Lay Mixed straight up Incinerated

my life is My Own wherever I Roam know my swagger Hides Tones of lasting Devotion
it's a very Deep Ocean it's Sink or Swim Think Of Him as pandora's box Re-opened

I don't think Execution's Scary that's why I'm Revolutionary now that the Confusions Buried
sometimes my Movement Varies but I stay in the Shadow's of Battle I don't wanna let a Gat Go

but I'm sick of getting Hassled so every task is Tackled and then trapt in Lassos
I'm relaxed and At Foes chasing stacks is Natural my hatchets hackin Flat Skulls

I lace tracks with Mad Flow I beef so much I'm Stabbin Cattle
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Re: Battle Proven (Revised)

Postby Ka0t1c » Feb 13th, '09, 04:04

wow, welcome to the next level!

but I'm sick of getting Hassled so every task is Tackled and then trapt in Lassos
I'm relaxed and At Foes chasing stacks is Natural my hatchets hackin Flat Skulls

I lace tracks with Mad Flow I beef so much I'm Stabbin Cattle
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: Battle Proven (Revised)

Postby mcZu » Feb 13th, '09, 22:10

Sick, loved each line. Multies have been used well, vocab was pretty good and the flow was sick :y:
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Re: Battle Proven (Revised)

Postby Rain Matrix » Feb 13th, '09, 22:15

thanks I tried to step it up a little
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Re: Battle Proven (Revised)

Postby Slim Zaddy » Feb 14th, '09, 08:24

i think it's sick, i liked it .. multies were nice .. ..gd job here man
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Re: Battle Proven (Revised)

Postby James R. » Feb 14th, '09, 08:28

Just fucking wow. That was your best piece man. Great fucking job.
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