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Postby Spyder » Feb 19th, '09, 23:57

im known around the world you know your impressed
that silly style you put out, you know your overdressed.
put it to rest ever syllable i speak leaves your ass weak
and i rock the charts harder than eminem last week,
rapsheets and cuffs everyone wants me imprisoned
man i guess i fucked up big this isnt what i invisioned
my decision almost cost me my life now im second guessin
i know i shouldnt be stressin, that god was teachin me a lesson
grab my smith&wesson and head outside to the clubs,
cuz bitch when im rowdy best believe sumones gettin fuck up
i spew venom so get cruncked up, then i throw ur tosro in a dumptruck.
straight fire ill burn your ass leavin you torched
and put out more beats than dr dre and scott storch.
i make this shit hott and i do what your not
cuz like water transportation ill motorboat her crotch.
looks like you forgot i came from the illest crew around
blood stained and drowned, ill run your ass out the town
dont make a sound when your in the fuckin pressence of the champ
my lyrics turn you to the fucking goo i put in my lava lamp.
silly little bitches come and ask me to battle please
you wont because you know that i have a better stratagy,
its key, to get out the first punch and leave them lifeless
try this before you find me side of your bed wit a nightstik.
who write this, its slim313shady remember the name
cuz when u ask ur girl"who the fuck was that"she'll tell ya the same.


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Re: freestyle

Postby gutawafang » Feb 20th, '09, 02:30

NICE.

Couple of punchlines here and there. :y:

Pretty good use of multies. :y:

flow: great. I could rap it out.

Overall, 9/10. Record.
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Re: freestyle

Postby Solace » Feb 20th, '09, 02:38

That was dope for a freestyle. I hope it was a freestyle, cause i know a lotta people that just write shit down quickly, fix it up and then post it calling it a "freestyle".
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Re: freestyle

Postby rahul.never2far » Feb 20th, '09, 04:25

That was just great! Learned a lot from it :y:
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Re: freestyle

Postby Spyder » Feb 20th, '09, 05:33

wow dudes thanks. love the comment and yes epiph 100% freestlye, just for you to make up for the lousy sig i had lol :D
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Re: freestyle

Postby ¤°~ Jose ~¤°© » Feb 20th, '09, 17:34

good lookin' out bro for a freestyle it was great :8)
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