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Sixteen done in ten min.

Postby mcZu » Feb 24th, '09, 22:44

No title, just a 16 which I wrote out of boredom.

Motion picture rating system wise I’m a lyrical triple X
Soaked in a figurative speech that goes physical with living facts
Coming hard is just a common thing for a rap Davinci in fact;
My code infects like a virus with living cyanide that maps,
Out all the enemy lines that cross my lines when I do rap.
So figure out why I grab the mic and break up the fasting
Hungry and I digest way past the average rate of decent rapping
Metabolism crossed with lyricism when I grace an instrumental
Instant defeat for enemies after I engage in a phase of sentinels
Rap pyramid vividly painted by a rap arsonist with flaming fists
‘Cause I have a fire which equals Ra drawn in hieroglyphics
Physics study my visual phenomenon when I spit in glitches
‘Cause I flow way to natural for a change in thee rap scripture
Pause the show and play the chain of ending lyrical figures
Similar to the economy declining demand and supply rate
So supply more lyrical anatomy in the verses that apply change.

Feedback is appreciated.
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Re: Sixteen done in ten min.

Postby Emadyville » Feb 24th, '09, 23:08

Sounding like Mc Anonymous :n:
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Re: Sixteen done in ten min.

Postby mcZu » Feb 24th, '09, 23:09

Emadyville wrote:Sounding like Mc Anonymous :n:


No I don't sound like him, it's just that our styles sortoff look alike. Anyways thanks for checking it out.
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Re: Sixteen done in ten min.

Postby Emadyville » Feb 24th, '09, 23:19

No it was good, just sounded like I was reading a less lyrical version of Anonymous, not like you were biting I know that, just didn't do it for me cause of that.
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Re: Sixteen done in ten min.

Postby mcZu » Feb 24th, '09, 23:23

^No problem bro, I'm glad that you took time and read it. You are free to say whatever you want to :y:
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Re: Sixteen done in ten min.

Postby rahul.never2far » Feb 25th, '09, 02:31

It was awesome.... I haven't read much of MC Anonymous... just 1-2 times... so to me you didn't sound like him...
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Re: Sixteen done in ten min.

Postby gutawafang » Feb 25th, '09, 03:04

I like your vocab.

And this punchphrase too: "rap Davinci " :y:

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Re: Sixteen done in ten min.

Postby Slim Zaddy » Feb 25th, '09, 14:06

i think it's good man, i liked it , you got the lyrical ability , flow was okay .. overall ,, it's pretty good .,, keep it up pal .. :y:
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Re: Sixteen done in ten min.

Postby mcZu » Feb 25th, '09, 15:19

Thanks for the feed people, appreciate it. :y:
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