fake g's

[k-digga]

You a fake, a fony
You need to bow down and blow me
You call yourself a "G"
But a g don't cry and rock himself to sleep
might as well hit the bed and f*ckin smash on your own head
You can't pull no jack
And ur rhymes are f*cking whack
You want to go out and hustle
But you can't find no bustle,
There aint know future in yo frontin
Ull never amount to nothin
Your a f*ckin snake who aint sh*t but a fake,
You say you got shot
U know, hit with the red dot
Shot by who? Don't anybody even know you.
From one g to anotha
I forgot to tell you I just got done with your motha,
I left her in the bed with a blast to the head!
So let me end this quickly
As I move sound and swiftly
Stop fakin tha funk
as I go back to layin in my bunk.drinkin henny and some beers thinkin about how to deal with you queers! Peace
Tru blu for life

[Solace]

That was horrible...But I can see your beginning. First of all, your lines are like 5 syllables, make them like 9. Also, you kept changing rhyme schemes, first it was good like "bone, hone" then eventually you changed it and rhymed the words in one line and skipped the next (hope you get me ). Structure is pretty good for a beginner kept the last line...Keep working man, ill be checking in on your stuff to see your improvement

[neversnooze]

you kept the meaning of the this from top to bottom so everything else was miserably done. you can work on your vocab and be creative with it. when you write have some multies with longer lines. Work on your structure, one line is longer than the other.

5/10

[Slim Zaddy]

i got nothin to say ,, enough said by shadymademe and neversnooze ,, take what they say by heart ,, gd luck next time bro