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Re: Lethal Instrument

Postby Requiem » Feb 27th, '09, 01:20

nice shit man, actually the best drop i've seen from you. flow was there, structure was good. and u even snuck in some nice multis.
keep shit like this up :8)
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Re: Lethal Instrument

Postby Spyder » Feb 27th, '09, 01:24

i thot it was pretty good, there were some rhyim things for me but al in all i thot it worked
some nice use of vocab decent structure.
id say 9/10 for me
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Re: Lethal Instrument

Postby Emadyville » Feb 27th, '09, 01:33

That was pretty dope, good rhyming :y:
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Re: Lethal Instrument

Postby Solace » Feb 27th, '09, 03:24

It was nice but the rhyme scheme caught me randomly so i couldnt flow correctly. But im guessing you flow to it well so good job nevertheless :y:
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Re: Lethal Instrument

Postby gutawafang » Feb 27th, '09, 06:06

"If I’m God then lyrics are my prophets and apostles" WOW.

Nice structure. Flow was okay. I give it 8. :happy:
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