What Have I Become

[Solace]

I've been changed, literally a stranger to myself,
Looking at the mirror, cant I just shut my mouth,
But you pushed me too far, almost fell of the cliff,
Now the raw mentality has been ripped to a strip,
The foul curses of the mind can embody the soul,
Death of a teenagers youth can embody the old,
A shoddy shotty to make brains start rotting with mold,
There isn't a stopping the simple plotting of bold,
Centuries of rotting in cold, a frozen heart barely beats,
A dead end, a crusted corner which I bet barely treats,
Simply put, a self description of whats in the mirror,
Used to be clearer, a blur, mystery is walking nearer.

meh...

[Requiem]

its interesting man, i'll give it that. lol. liked the middle, cuz flow was better, and rhymes were good. some multies seemed forced, but it was a decent piece, lol.

[gutawafang]

Good use of vocabulary. Good practice. Period.

[neversnooze]

the combination with your vocabulary and metaphors brought out some lost emotion in this piece.
good write epiph 8/10

[mcZu]

Beginning was a bit weak, but it became better later on. Not bad.

[Solace]

Thanks all