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[\\.NEW.//] Criminal Intent

Postby Ice_Scarred » Feb 13th, '09, 05:12

Something I worked on in about 10-15 minutes. Nothing special just a small drop. Feedback appreciated! :y:

When I drop, the shit be hot, explode like a bomb/
Rock over to the the status of Hova, doing time like Saddam/
Droppin a rhyme, droppin a dime, or coppin your mom/
Lite work for a person who's high status is mine/
I'm crushing your mind, with lyrics disguised as a crime/
Moving up in this world, millions by the time I was 9/
Moving units, partolling corners with the ruthless K-9's/
No guns involved, but my bullets is shattering time/
Lyrical assault, or just Cali's confined/
Captivate at a high rate but i'm missing a sign/
Can't simulate the verses that are destined to shine/
Am I looking for patterns? Or am I looking for answers?/
Out with the deaths of particular prances/
Last edited by Ice_Scarred on Feb 14th, '09, 03:08, edited 1 time in total.
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Re: [\\.NEW.//] Criminal Intent

Postby neversnooze » Feb 13th, '09, 05:47

your flow was good. you used multies fairly well in each end of the line, but personally i just found this boring(dull).

7/10 nice job and be creative
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Re: [\\.NEW.//] Criminal Intent

Postby Slim Zaddy » Feb 13th, '09, 20:29

i think you had the flow, multies were good .. it's was short and sweet ,, maybe more vocab ,, will make it better , but anyway ,, gd job :y:
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Re: [\\.NEW.//] Criminal Intent

Postby Ice_Scarred » Feb 14th, '09, 03:07

Thanks guys. BTW, the first line got messed up! I didnt notice that it was seperated by the other work.
Sorry it was dull. I'll work on everything. It was just something small I worked on. 10 minutes by yourself, can lead you 2 actually write something. Thanks again!
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Re: [\\.NEW.//] Criminal Intent

Postby Ice_Scarred » Feb 19th, '09, 03:25

Bump
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Re: [\\.NEW.//] Criminal Intent

Postby gutawafang » Feb 19th, '09, 03:50

Yeah, as said, flow's great. Good way of expressing your criminal intent. Keep it up Boston. :y:
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Re: [\\.NEW.//] Criminal Intent

Postby Ice_Scarred » Feb 19th, '09, 23:49

gutawafang wrote:Yeah, as said, flow's great. Good way of expressing your criminal intent. Keep it up Boston. :y:


Boston? I'm not Boston, lol. Thanks anyway.
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Re: [\\.NEW.//] Criminal Intent

Postby gutawafang » Feb 20th, '09, 01:49

Ice_Scarred wrote:
gutawafang wrote:Yeah, as said, flow's great. Good way of expressing your criminal intent. Keep it up Boston. :y:


Boston? I'm not Boston, lol. Thanks anyway.


LOL. Accidental, cuz I was reading Boston lyrics again. HAHA. Yeah, I wish to see more of your works, Scarred! :happy:
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Re: [\\.NEW.//] Criminal Intent

Postby Ice_Scarred » Feb 21st, '09, 04:11

gutawafang wrote:
Ice_Scarred wrote:
gutawafang wrote:Yeah, as said, flow's great. Good way of expressing your criminal intent. Keep it up Boston. :y:


Boston? I'm not Boston, lol. Thanks anyway.


LOL. Accidental, cuz I was reading Boston lyrics again. HAHA. Yeah, I wish to see more of your works, Scarred! :happy:


lol, thanks
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Re: [\\.NEW.//] Criminal Intent

Postby Ice_Scarred » Mar 4th, '09, 02:37

Wow....bump...
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