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The protagonist

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The protagonist

Postby mcZu » Mar 3rd, '09, 21:32

The protagonist

I be -like the insect with pollen- always reigning on top
-Like an umbrella made of iron- so you better push stop
‘Cause I -like the organ with the iris- will ‘flush’ some
Haters in my ‘street’ through the sewage, must I come
-Like ejaculating- over to proof there is no ‘3 of a kind’
Just me and myself are ‘holding em’ down with rhymes
My, am I -like Florida- that arrogant when I write lines?
Probably yes, so ride on and let me put down the signs
‘Cause I, and I -no nose in between- only do shine
So it seems that I …..’see’ solely me rapping fine
Mine -like a bomb on the ground- sound is viewed in rhymes
So come -like that shooter game- around the next time
With some more feasible content instead of displaying crap
I didn’t say something relevant other then ratifying crap rap
But I build it up in a different matter so it’s pretty obvious this
Is something that only could be done by the protagonist…

Feedback is appreciated.
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Re: The protagonist

Postby Slim Zaddy » Mar 5th, '09, 16:15

i liked it man , concept was there , i like the imagery used, flows was off and on, rhymes and lyrics were great , it's a good drop homie , keep it up :y:
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Re: The protagonist

Postby mcZu » Mar 5th, '09, 22:27

Thanks for the feed Z_Em, appreciate it man :y:
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Re: The protagonist

Postby mcZu » Mar 5th, '09, 22:34

Thanks Coleon, appreciate you checking it out man :y:
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