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NEW Solace - Dear Dad

Postby Solace » Mar 6th, '09, 00:23

[Intro]
Hey...Dad...Loving those memories man...I dedicate this song to you...Ayo..

[Verse]
So many times I've been fucked over and I hate it,
Wish you would just die but I don't ever say shit,
You're just a pig that never pays child support,
Pretended to have late shifts, always filing reports,
While you lied and went to fuck some cheap bitches,
Someday you'll be on the ground, and you'll need stitches,
I take that framed picture of you and then I smash it,
Open up the cupboard, then I break all of the glasses,
Feel my knuckles bleeding, all you hearing is a thud,
I'm a little psychotic, well I fear it's in my blood,
I've always hated you, love? Well I never got it,
Never received it, nope never got it from my father,
When mom had cancer, you didn't give a fuck,
Pointless being, off yourself and just give it up,
And one day I might turn out to be worthless,
I'll follow in your footsteps, haha yeah you heard it.

[Hook]
Can't wait for your funeral, I won't be there,
If I did, I'd spit on your casket, nobody cares,
Just a piece of trash, I would place shit above you,
One last thing to say: Oh I never loved you.

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Re: NEW Solace - Dear Dad

Postby Requiem » Mar 6th, '09, 03:30

i fed some of the lyrics on msn, but i really liked it man. the rhymes weren't as good as ur normal pieces, but i can feel the intensity of the emotions. great job man :y:
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Re: NEW Solace - Dear Dad

Postby Solace » Mar 6th, '09, 03:39

Ice Killa wrote:i fed some of the lyrics on msn, but i really liked it man. the rhymes weren't as good as ur normal pieces, but i can feel the intensity of the emotions. great job man :y:

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Re: NEW Solace - Dear Dad

Postby Robbie G » Mar 6th, '09, 04:23

damn dude, that wasn't overly complex or lyrical but it had a ton of emotion in it. :y:

I liked this, record it with anger in your voice :p
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Re: NEW Solace - Dear Dad

Postby Slim Zaddy » Mar 6th, '09, 09:28

yup solace you keep it simple and smooth , it's perfect for the audio section, the concept was great to talk about i felt what are you trying to say , you got the emotions and that's what important in this kind of pieces, gd job bro :y:
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Re: NEW Solace - Dear Dad

Postby Xray » Mar 6th, '09, 10:16

Like I said on msn deep piece homie, my dad's an asshole a different way so I can't relate, but fuck a dad. :smoking:
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Re: NEW Solace - Dear Dad

Postby Solace » Mar 6th, '09, 22:22

Thanks guys, glad you guys liked it.
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